What "I Don't Understand" is why you would find it so confusing that a man would rather pave his own path in life instead of following the path followed by sheep. It's not too difficult to comprehend, you know; some people would rather think for themselves than have a god do their thinking for them. There are many good books on the subject of atheism, and the best that I've come across is Atheism; The Case Against God, by George H. Smith. I'd suggest making a start with this one to answer some of your questions. I think you'll find it to be a refreshing challenge to your faith.
It took a few readings of this one for me to find out what I really thought about it, and each time that I read it, I found something new to like about it. At the beginning of the third paragraph, where you describe yourself in your room wearing a pair of pooh bear pajamas (cute desciption, by the way, and you probably look cute in them, too), I was there watching as you chewed on your pen and thought about what to write about next in your journal. And right near the end, where you wrote, "All I have is beauty at the bottom of a beer bottle," I laughed because it was such a brilliant line. This one might not have been your best work, but it definitely deserves to be read.
Man, I don't even know where to begin or what to say about what I just read. I don't think I can say I ever experienced anything close to what you describe in your poem, and I hope I never do. "Fearsome fangs and blazing tongue...." I loved it.
Have you ever been to an open mike night and read your poetry to a crowd of people? I did, once, and I had to get drunk before I got on stage. I was a nervous wreck, and I almost backed down several times. Do you know what I found out about my poetry? It sounds better if you read it to yourself instead of reading it to other people. It just loses a lot of it's meaning if it's read out loud. I think In The Blue is one of those poems that could be read to a room full of people, and not lose any of it's meaning in the process. I enjoyed it a lot.
Definitely an ambitious poem, a grand tour of eternity, and I enjoyed it. Personally, I would have thrown in the birth and death of the dinosaurs, the rise and fall of a great empire, and the eventual destruction of the planet in one huge explosion of flames and screams, but then again, I'm a demented psychopathic poet convinced of his own god-like genius. Just check out my portfolio, and you'll see what I mean. Write on, brother.
Hey, I don't mean to laugh, but your poem is crazy. It sounds like something a neurotic comedian could do in his stand-up routine. Your not crazy, are you? Anyway, I applaud your work; you captured perfectly those annoying jingles that play endlessly in our minds. And, no, I'm not some sick bastard who makes fun of the crippled. Your poem really brightened my day, and I sicerely hope that that was your intention, otherwise I'm going to fell really, really bad if it wasn't. Thanks for the good read.
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