I think this is a good start to a story.Keep it going and I would like to see what happens at kelly's, with the sister being left home alone and what happens when dad gets home. Is the sister younger or older? Who arrives home first you or dad?
With Eric grinning wildly, what were his REAL plans for the evening?
Just wanted to stop in and say HI to all the newcomers. I'm just so amazed at how many people are still joining this site. I have only been on here a couple months myself. I hope you all enjoy the site and I look forward to reading your stories or poems.
Ilike the description scene in this story.Do you plan on adding to the story? I am interested in seeing who it is the old hat belongs to and why he is at this old mans door in the midle of the night. A very good story that gets you involved quickly. Let me know if you continue it.
Emerin, I think this is great, i can't wait to read on. You make me feel like i will not ever be able to write this well. I hope it comes through me to write half as well. I did have a little trouble at first keeping the two older girls names pinned to them. I think I have it straight now.
I just wanted to say that I think this is great. I just lost my mother two months ago and your story brought tears to my eyes. I cannot seem to rid myself of any of my mothers belongings. I want to keep what was treasured by her.I am now living in my mother's house temporarily to feel closer to her. I would enjoy reading more of your story.
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