Obviously you have some potent feelings of loss over this relationship but I think you could explore them further to make this poem more potently tap into them and release them. Try to avoid cliches like "I wish you luck on the road ahead" and "sparkle in your eyes."
I think your friendship DID matter. You are saying you made a connection, but this person has sqaundered a beautiful gift and you feel betrayed.
I need to feel this more. I need to be shown more, not told.
I think you've got some beautfiul talent here, and much of it is your sincerity.
With a practice of craft, you might really be able to render those feelings more fully into writing.
Printed from https://writing.com/main/profile/reviews/veespencer
All Writing.Com images are copyrighted and may not be copied / modified in any way. All other brand names & trademarks are owned by their respective companies.
Generated in 0.07 seconds at 11:10pm on Nov 04, 2024 via server WEBX1.
View Portfolio
Visit Notebook
Send Gift Points
Awards
Badges
Send Email
Community Newsfeed
General Discussion
Sponsored Items
Book of Trinkets
Static Items
Books
Groups
Interactive Stories
Audio
Campfire Creatives
Community Notes
Crossword Puzzles
Documents
Folders
Images
In & Outs
Madlibs
Photo Albums
Polls
Product Reviews
Quizzes
Survey Forms
Web Pages
Word Searches
