Obviously you have some potent feelings of loss over this relationship but I think you could explore them further to make this poem more potently tap into them and release them. Try to avoid cliches like "I wish you luck on the road ahead" and "sparkle in your eyes."
I think your friendship DID matter. You are saying you made a connection, but this person has sqaundered a beautiful gift and you feel betrayed.
I need to feel this more. I need to be shown more, not told.
I think you've got some beautfiul talent here, and much of it is your sincerity.
With a practice of craft, you might really be able to render those feelings more fully into writing.
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