I really enjoyed this straightforward poem. What a great analogy to have a Martian read a newspaper about the story of Earth, but miss the most important story of all! It's sadly similar to what many people hear about world history and never hear of the most important Person Who ever lived! I hope the author keeps writing these sorts of pieces.
This is just hilarious! I found your name on the block thanking writing.com for being such a great site. You have a future as a comedy writer, this is awesome! I was at a commuter campus when dinosaurs roamed the earth and it's as true now (I assume) as it was then. Great work!
Well written and informative. I'm a technical writer who is intrigued by copywriting and I have great admiration for good copywriters. This is a nice work on an essay about a topic you are obviously well versed in! I hope yo write more or have written more! Good work!
What a wonderful way to help budding writers with talent! This initiative deserves support from all Preferred Authors and should be supported by all authors. Here's to promoting excellence and talent at a website chock full of excellence and talent! I'm on board!
This author is brilliant! I hope he continues to write, his stuff is pure comic gold. I can just hear this as a stand-up routine by a gifted comedian or writer. I couldn't stop laughing at this silly tale of mishaps. Keep writing, we need more comedy like this, it's just great!!
This article was laugh-out-loud funny. Dave Barry has a competitor on the loose, and had better watch his booty! The line about tying the cot to one's leg before going to sleep inside the tent was a memorable and funny image. I could just see the sleepwalker trying to get out of the tent dragging the cot. I will read more of this guy's port. Great work!!
A very nice essay by a concerned individual who obviously knows about the topic. Being aware of these brave men and women who risk their lives to keep us safe will make us all more aware of these selfless people, and help us understand who they are and what they do. Well reasoned and thought through. Good work!
I would have paid money to see this filmed somewhere. What a riot of a story... the players thought they had a sure thing, only to learn how out matched they were. Well written and paced, the colloquialisms are a little difficult to follow, but you can figure out what's being said if you keep reading. A hilarious story. Nice work!
This is an interesting story. The author leads you through a peaceful beginning, but builds up quickly to a riveting climax and lets you down at the end. The pacing is good, the language is well written, and the conclusion is fitting. Nice work on an interesting premise!
I hope you expand this little nugget of possibilities. It has a good story base and I think it could be a real barn-burner if you had a kidnapping or some such by the father to get his daughter back, and then Craig and Mike would have to use their detective skills to learn where she was and whether she wanted to come "home."
There are minor edits needed but you'll find those as you expand the story. What might really be of benefit to you is helping you learn better how to express emotions and conflict. If you can get hold of a copy of "Immediate Fiction" by Jerry Cleaver, read it and apply his principles, you'll learn a great deal. I found it after I had written my novels and it helped with later edits and with my new novel.
Hey Kenzie, I will be praying for you and your fibromyalgia. My cousin has this condition and it is really debilitating.
I'll also be praying for your knee injury. When it rains...
I hope the judge agrees that your condition is unpredictable and that a full-time job is not necessarily something you can cope with right now. I'm sure you'd be working if you could!
Well I think this song is darling. What an adventure for you to have the nerve to sing and post this! And what a young, girlish heart you still have, bless you!
I'm 55 myself and I admire you tremendously. I hope you post more songs here. My dear friend Ramona is also a lyricist and posts [unsung] songs at her port here:
This is an absolutely beautiful poem. I love this imagery:
Warm the soul beneath African suns
Listen to the inner whisper of Savannah winds
As Zambezi waters flow through your veins
It makes this wonderful continent seem like a breathing entity, yet you did not make it one. You gave credit to God for His creating this place.
Your love for this land is obvious, and I have high hopes that Africa will lead many other lands back to the simple faith in God that we need so desperately. God loves African people very dearly, I know. P have prayed for your countries and will continue to do so.
I like this a lot... it's easy to say you're sure of what is going on, but this kind of questioning is exactly what God wants you to do. I hope He reaches down to you at the right time to let you know that He's always, always there. Many blessings to you!
Wow, what a graphic journey. I felt as if I was there sharing her feelings, yet for Mary it was something that was more real than anything else in her life. Very powerful!
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