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Rated: E | (4.0)
Thank you for the interesting read! I liked the description in this poem. The imagery was great. I felt like In was in the moment.

Eyes azure observe
"Oh well….”
“Yahhhhhhh!”
A castle falls,
A gargantuan tan foot, soft but coarse
ends construction.

I'm unsure of this stanza. I don't understand why the boy is begins by saying oh well, and then yahh to the destruction of the sand castle. maybe I'm missing something. Maybe another stanza is needed to explore the boys feelings towards the sand castle. (I could also just be over thinking it). Good poem though.
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