That was simply one of the most spectacular pieces I've read so far on writng.com. Your detailed descriptions empower your story instead of watering it down. you make your readers feel like they are actually there. I felt like I could taste, hear, and smell all the noises while she ate the chocolate. It is a perfect piece for Valentine's. I certainly enjoyed it and I hope to read more. If I may suggest, you should put a warning. . . .
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WARNING: This piece may cause you to have cravings for chocolate.
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LOL
I can't even express how much I loved this piece. Maybe its just because I'm a big chocolate fan. The only way I can truly show how much I loved this is with a gift of appreciation.
-Kitsu
i liked your poem very much. It was simple piece, but its because of simplicity that made it so good. You got right to the point and showered the reader in sorrow and fear. i know that may or may not be your point, but it is a wonderfully wriiten piece. My favorite part was when you are asked, "Why do you fightwhen you will never win? Why not fling yourself
away, welcome the end?” This leads me to question my world around me and why I am fighting against something I can never beat. It is truly a piece that leaves an impression.
-Kitsu
That poem was really touching. the rhyming scheme is a bit old school, but it was a perfect effect for the subject. it gave a sense of grayness, but let a light shine symbolizing hope. When I first started reading I had no clue that it was concerning war, but the the sudden change in scene was exhilerating (sorry if it's spelled wrong). It leaves you thinking of the war and military matters at hand. I loved it.
-Kitsu
I like your biogaphy. I'm looking forward to reading some more of your items and about your book Home of the Red Fox. I do promise to read your items, but for now i got to head of to class. I love the way you oriented your biography. It's so neat and organize, but a little laid-back. LOL
-Kitsu
Thank you so much! I really needed this article. It really helped me understand my situation I have. Thank you so much. Your article was clear and understandable. I'm very grateful that there are people who are writing helpful articles like you!
-Kitsu
I liked the poem "Where I Was Before". What really grabbed me was how you made the reader envision a place of fear, fire, and dispair. Then at the end, to have it end with o beloved holding you in her arms to only find out she was your savor. I loved the idea! The only thing is that your rhyming was a bit bland and annoying, sorry to say. You kept using words that were rhyming with things like wrappiing and snapping. A new choice of rhyming might spice up this poem.
-Kitsu
PS. Sorry if I spelled rhyming wrong, its my worst word to spell.
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