The story has much potential and great descriptions. i like how you capture everything the bushman comes across like the flock of birds and the following line:
'This trail took him over some small hills that overlooked vast green pastures, dotted with Black Angus Cows. In the distance a large great Oak tree, stripped of its leaves, stood stark against the clear blue sky.'
But don't get to side tracked with the surroundings! something odd yet meaningless could throw your reader off course!
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