You have an excellent understanding of how micro stories should be written. The role-reversal, realization of power, and internal dialog were all masterfully executed.
The interaction between Billy and Bob was fantastic.
My favorite part of the story was Billy's development from a simple cute kid who follows the rules, to a cruel indulgent boy who selfishly claims power over everyone around him. The scene where he questions whether or not to touch bob's crotch for the first time was probably my favorite bit. It all goes down-hill from there (IN A GOOD WAY :D )
I also loved the shrinking scene with Danny. I had to keep going back to that one ;D
So yeah, you're stuff is really inspiring. I hope you come back someday.
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