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7 Public Reviews Given
14 Total Reviews Given
Review Style
When I review something, I like to observe every little detail and give my overall, honest impression of the piece of literature. UPDATE: I'm back from some kind of hiatus, so if you need something reviewed...I have returned and I am willing to review you once more.
I'm good at...
Looking for punctuation and spelling mistakes as well as giving my honest opinion on your work.
Favorite Genres
Science fiction, Action/adventure, Horror, and Mystery.
Least Favorite Genres
Erotica
Favorite Item Types
Short story and Poetry
Least Favorite Item Types
Novel/Novella
I will not review...
Anything with erotica (I understand it, it just doesn't interest me.)
Public Reviews
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Review of No Dawn, No Day  Open in new Window.
Review by Johnny Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
Dear Keaton,

This was a deep piece and very creative might I add. You not only have an seemingly endless rhyme scheme going on but it conveys a story and emotion. You, my reviwee, have an amazing talent that need not be wasted. Continue to let your voice be known to others and write on.

Keep on writing,

Johnny
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Review of Hell in Ipsi  Open in new Window.
Review by Johnny Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
Hello Don Dadda,

Sorry for not taking your request earlier but, school is a deceitful mistress.

Anyway, I was reading your story and in all honesty, it sounds really good and you put plenty of detail in the story(gore and all), but I do have a few suggestions:


I feel like you should take the story from third person omniscient to first person(not that anything is wrong with third person omniscient, but it would seem more interesting if you put the story in a certain character's view,in fact, you could do a first person for each character.)

You do not have to put so many indentations in your story(unless that is your style)


Besides that this is a really good story that grabs your attention and forces you to read on.

Keep on writing,

Johnny
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Review by Johnny Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.0)
This sounds pretty good. This actually sounds more like a script to a potential movie to a good franchise but, there are some minor mistakes to correct in this piece, such as:

There has to be more of an introduction to this story(it sounds like we're in the middle of something, unless you want to do a brief flashback on how they got there in the first place.

Besides that and a few spelling errors, I truly enjoyed reading this creative pice of work.

Keep on writing,

Johnny
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