Wow. This is exceptionally great. Just reading sends a shiver down my spine, which is a good thing. I feel like I am actually in the character's situation. It seems to me that you put a lot of thought planning and writing this fantastic piece of work.
This is one of the best prologues that I have read, and I have read plenty of them. However, what makes this one stand out is the fact that you have tried to make the reader feel like he is actually inside the character's situation. This is one of the best ways to make the reader want to read on. This definitely makes me want to read on.
I found this first chapter to be exciting. The way that you have drawn inspiration from the likes of Star Wars, Halo, Project Snowblind as well as others really gives this a real egde to it. Great job
This short story has really caught my attention ever since I first found it. It contains many of the things that I enjoy reading. I hope that more could be added to this story. I believe that any additions would make this story something that would be read over and over again.
This first page has really caught my attention and I will be pleased if more of the same was written as I look forward to reading the rest of it. thanks again, Triviumfan.
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