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Review of Perspectives on a Rainy Day

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

Hi fyn,

From my drought ridden state, I read this poem with enthusiasm. I love the story of the rain and especially your daughter telling you she loves you. What a fabulous rainy day poem! I enjoyed the vision of the pup as he popped in at the start and at the end warming your feet. One nice tool you used was numbering each stanza with the Roman numerals. It is a great way to put each part of the continuation of the story in “chapters.” I detected nothing needing your attention mechanically.

Thanks for writing your story. I remember the rain in Maui and was able to relate and resonate with each word of your free verse form. Looking forward to the scores of poems you will write for PPC5.

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#4775875

Review of I used to sing a song!!!

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Rated: E

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Hello Tatsuyakemi,

At your request, I am reading and reviewing your story “I used to sing a song!!!” I have some thoughts to share with you. I hope you will find them helpful.

The first sentence is good because it prepares the reader for a diary. The experiences hold a special place. Thinking while sitting on a bench was a good place to return to at the end. There were names of artists in the diary. I do not know who these people are. They had an impact on a life. Miss Mori had a significantly strong effect from high school. All the experiences demonstrated the facets of your life making you the happiest.

Your English is pretty good, however there were some places I had to read a few times to understand. One word used several times was “wrought” which should be “wrote.” In the sentence, “Until onetime I was an innocent student,” can be written more correctly with the phrase, “once upon a time.” Another thing to correct is there is no period after Miss as a title of an unmarried woman. You wrote about Fukaya, a 23 year old niece but Fukaya is male so would not be a niece but a nephew.

Thank you for the privilege to read and review your story. There is a place to select what type of story it is, the genre, when you are noting it is a “drama” and “novel.” It was not clear if this is a fictional diary, or your own diary. If it is your personal diary, you would want to check the genre “Non-Fiction.”If you have any questions about the review feel free to email me.

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#4775813

Review of A vent to the WDC. I love you all

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

Hi Kevstar,

Thanks for sharing your story. Understand how you feel about contributing your fair share. Ou are willing to do whatever job you can do right now. I am proud you are taking that step. Believe it or not, i feel confident she and her family don’t mind giving a helping hand. We all like to go the extra mile for people. The WdC Angel Army group has a free upgrade program. I will go there now and nominate you. You will hear of their decision directly. As time allows I want to read more of your work.

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#4775812

Review of The Thirteenth Floor

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Rated: 13+

| (5.0)

Hello Sumojo,

I came to read your Drabble linked in Newsfeed. “The Thirteenth Floor” is exactly 100 words. Congratulations for telling a complete story, ie: opening, middle, and closing in that brief time. The idea is original. With my luck I can see myself stopping at the 13th floor. How disastrous that would be! Nice active verbs and descriptive words to keep the reader engaged to see where the story went. When the door “slammed shut” I could almost hear it.Nice job on a difficult challenge to write a complete story in 100 words.

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#4775712

Review of The March

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Rated: 13+

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Hello Slowmotionsunset,

I am reading and reviewing your poem, “The March.” I liked the topic and the execution of the free form poem. I saw a documentary on Emporer penguins which helped me imagine those in your poem moving in a direction. I detected a lyrical feel when reading it out loud. It moves on to be dark, but still has a light feel. It may be the language. The horror of an assault my a weapon is clothed in the gun type which was not familiar to me. I looked it up when I finished reading. The horror of such a massacre did not hit until I looked to see a Kalashnikov is an assault rifle. The second description I had to think about was “cataracted sun.” I recently had cataract surgery. I assumed it meant blurry or distorted. I like being stretched with new to me vocabulary. Thank you for writing your expressive poem.

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#4775708

Review of Exercise in Settings

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Rated: E

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Hello Gunny,

I am reading and reviewing your scene setting piece, “Exercise in Settings.” The memories were illustrated masterfully. I felt like I was outside playing, and heard mothers calling me back inside. I don’t go quite as far back, but my mother told me about the ice chips. We did have a bread and sweet pastry truck and had our glass milk bottles delivered to our home. My mom loved the milk bottles because at the top of each one was cream she used in her coffee. I enjoyed reading the details of those carefree summer days. It is true dads tended to put a damper on things.

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#4774908

Review of The Beginning . . .

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Rated: E

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Hello fyn,

I had the pleasure visiting your portfolio this morning. One could spend literally days browsing and reading your work. Your port is a library unto itself. I chose “In the Beginning . . .” to read because it was recent and not previously reviewed. Here are thoughts I had. I hope you find them useful.

The concept for the story is timely. Many think AI is the beginning of the end. Presenting the computer as a familiar object swayed me to the side of the computer, if taking an opposite view of the phenomena. I can’t say enough positives about the masterful word choices particularly active verbs and personifying the inner computer functions. “A bit mated with a random byte in an algorithm” is one example of the masterful arrangement of words. You paint a picture showing all the way. You know how to do that. In showing and not telling the story, I had the chance to picture my own computer as the story unfolded. That made it personal and relevant.

A couple of suggestions include one space between one of the paragraphs did not come out double spaced. The other matter is to make use of selecting all three opportunities for genre types. More people may read as they seek items to read by their favorite genre. I would replace ‘other’ because it directs you to nothing specific, and then select a third.

I had no intention to stop in today. Somewhere in reading and reviewing your portfolio came up. I am thrilled it did because your writing is above all the rest. I will return as often as time permits to read more.

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#4774607

Review of Blackmail

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Rated: 13+

| (4.5)

Hi Theresa,

I visited your portfolio, looking for a recent piece that hadn’t yet been reviewed. “Blackmail” is just what I was looking for. I have a couple of thoughts and suggestions about your short story. I trust they will resonate with you.

The title and description engaged me. There had to be a juicy tale ahead. In a short, short story you covered a huge subject clearly and succinctly. I liked that. The sequence of events moved seamlessly via dialogue. It almost had the rhythm of poetry. I saw a word I haven’t seen for a very long time: Tamp, as in “Tamp down the laughter. “ it surely is a specific verb!

I have a few things to bring to your attention. A few punctuation marks can be edited:
“It’s serious business. Needs a closing quotation mark. I saw what you did . . . lose your job. Needs quotation marks. The genre portion allows 3 genres, so you have the opportunity to add another. On the same note, I would replace “other “ to one more specific.

Thank you for the story which is quick and easy to read. It left me wanting more. The name and reason there is blackmail left unanswered is a terrific tool to leave every person reading it, not just me, wanting answers to those questions. You are a gifted writer. My stories generally ramble on. Yours reminded me that succinct should be in my arsenal. Thank you for that reminder.

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#4774505

Review of Chapter 25

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Rated: E

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Hello Darkscape Entertainment,

Welcome to WdC. Your work, “Chapter 25,” appeared on the Read &Review section. The opinions I have are from one person. I hope you will find them useful.

I became engaged with your hook. I knew several things about your character in the first line. It helps further character development by what and how something is said. Further how the message is answered gives an insight into the minds of each character.

One thing I noticed is numerous lines ending with a comma where there should be a period starting with, “. . . time with Tatum,” which are all typos.

I enjoyed reading this chapter. You have a professional style and presentation. Good job.

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#4774500

Review of To Pluto with Love

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Rated: 18+

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Hi Elisa,

Your poem, “To Pluto With Love,” appeared on Read & Review. The opinions I share of those of one person. I hope you resonate with them.

I did not feel nauseous at any time reading your poem. I admit I moved to reading without checking genres or the description you provided. Therefore, most of the way through I thought it was a nod toward our former planet Pluto. Perhaps I need my eyes and mind from birthday activities. I appreciated the quasi tongue in cheek. There was a lot of truth in three description and the slobbering nature of some dogs.

I saw the genre comedy after reading as well as the reference to nausea. I liked the topic, the free verse, and the warmth in the closing longing which if not meant for comedic effect was quite sweet.

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#4774493

Review of Raging Screams

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Rated: E

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Hello Julie D,

Welcome to WdC. Your first chapter, “Raging Screams” appeared on the Read & Review tab. The thoughts I share with you are the opinions of one person. I hope they will resonate.

Chapter 1 is written in a unique form with the last line of a paragraph wrapped into the first line of the next. I felt it was a good choice. I felt it built up tension and anticipation. I was left wanting to read more. Your characters were introduced with a brief reference to how they were connected with the main person. Revealing one was positive and one the opposite foretells of how the reader can expect them to behave in the future, as well as how the narrator feels about them.

I have a couple of suggestions. First, genre selection is important because readers can etc a genre they like to read and yours would be among the search results. You are allowed three so go ahead and select a third one. Also, the genre other doesn’t give the reader information with which to make a choice. Replace it with something like adventure. Secondly, as I finished reading I felt owed a glimpse of a clue of where the story is going. More of a teaser.

You have an easy writing style with words wisely selected that create a nice rhythm and flow. I look forward to more from you.

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#4773705

Review of Toe in the Water

for entry "Weezer Again"

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Rated: 13+

| (5.0)

Hello Beholden,

I have bee reading Toe in the Water for some time. I am taking the opportunity to write a review. Departing from my usual review format, I will give you my impressions.

I like your blog. Why do I like it? I like it because it is a fun place to stop in for a few minutes. I take that time as a break from stress and working through the plans I have for the day. It is akin to a newspaper editorial written by a free spirited writer. It is more like a commentary on things humans can relate to like what happens when one spider web falls into another? I think it may or may not stick. Each outcome is fine.

Thank you for pretty regular entries. The number of blogs I read you can count on one hand. I selfishly come here to be enlightened or to relive stress. It is a cool thing to know someone reads what you post in your blog. You are invites to mine anytime the mood moves you.

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#4773621

Review of Awake At Night

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

Hello yojina,

Welcome to Writing.com. We use the short cut: WdC. I read your poem “Awake At Night” and have a few thoughts to share. These are just one person’s opinions. I hope you find them helpful.

I closely relate to the insomnia you experience. Your poem is descriptive, showing the reader what is going on. This evoked feelings in me which is a good thing. It was a great choice to tell your story in the poem in first person. Biographical and/or non-fiction are not listed as genres, so I am only assuming this is personal. The free verse takes on a nice rhythm. Many lines were average length with only a few long lines.

Your first line grabbed my attention. I imagined myself lying in my bed. I liked the imagery of time dragging its feet and sleep avoiding you. I sense you are inexperienced writer. The technique of repetition in two consecutive lines, “Fear” and “Perhaps” evened me out, allowed me to slow down and take notice as the possible reasons you can’t fall asleep are revealed.

I don’t see any mechanical concerns. I wanted to suggest something about genres. Dark and Emotional are ideal choices. You are allowed one more. Readers find work by the genres they like. Your first work appears at several places so you are apt to get several reviews to keep that going you might want to add a genre like biographical if it applies to you personally.

I am very glad I happened upon your poem. It is very well thought out. I felt like it was right to the point with several points to emphasize ending in some dark thoughts. Which is okay because it left me wanting more. Just what a writer wants. Looking forward to more writing from you. Welcome again. Happy you have joined our community.

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#4773482

Review of My Favorite Summer

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Rated: E

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Hello Pumpkin,

I found your short story when I visited your portfolio tonight. I came to get acquainted as we are both participating in the merit badge exchange. I clicked on the latest item and read “My Favorite Summer.” I have some thoughts to share that I hope resonate with you.

First impression: My first choice to read is a short story. The title conjured up my own best summer. Your choice of genres prepared me for a summer romance. Your hook grabbed me. It set the scene and said the narrator was most likely a boy, and that his object of affection was a pretty girl. I wanted more, to find out what she looked like, and what made their summer special.

The story: Your storytelling skills are superb. I got as much satisfaction out of reading your story as if it was an entire novel. Your descriptive language and purposeful dialogue gave it depth and moved the piece forward.

The end: The illness surprised me. My mind previously jumped to more sinister reasons
Lou went to the country.

Mechanics: There are a few things to look after. In the line starting with, “Dave came out and said . . . home,so-a space is needed after the comma. In “. . . suspected her Mom had called” -M should be a small m. A question mark is needed after Granny in the line, “Why, Granny” and all are innocent typographical concerns.

I thoroughly enjoyed “My Favorite Summer.” “I could barely get a hello to roll off my tongue” was a magical phrase. It told me he was gobsmacked, that this was his first experience being attracted to a girl, and a great replacement phrase for the cat’s got your tongue. I loved all of it. Regardless of typos, I am rating five stars because our system doesn’t allow to go higher. I hope you keep writing more short stories. I have read some of your blog and it confirms my assessment which is you are a gifted writer. Bravo!

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#4772730

Review of Lena's Violin

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Rated: 13+

| (5.0)

Hi Mousethyme,

As November’s writing month is approaching, I thought of your novella, “Lena’s Violin.” I remember reading it. I came back to read in its current completed form. I have a couple of thoughts to share with you which I hope you find useful.

The plot and corresponding story lines are outstanding. I was immediately fond of Lena in her plight to be noticed by her parents. Her character as well as each of your characters were well developed. Linda, for example, as a villainous person came in and out of the story, yet I knew her kind well. That attests to your secure understanding of the elements of a great story. You show her and even the minor characters in a way each of them is memorable. Great job!

You have finished it and congratulations on the Quill award. It shows many agree with me. It was a fabulous piece for me to read. I am a musician and you nailed the overall and specific talk and actions of my fellow musicians. It is especially important to dress to the expectations of the occasion. She did everything correctly, including the way she fixed her hair. The braided bun would have stood out as going the extra step to present herself in a positive light.

One more run through with editing will help correct a few issues like, for example writing “I seen” instead of “I saw.”

I can bet readers enjoyed this as much as I did. Your dialogue is real and not filled with any “fluff.” I think it is ready to be sent to publishers. I can even picture the cover! You have a winning style. Kudos to you!

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#4771643

Review of the rhythm of writing

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Rated: E

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Hello Rhyssa,

Your poem "the rhythm of writing" came up under Read & Review at random. I am happy it did because I thoroughly enjoyed reading it. Often, it is difficult to get a nice flow in free verse and you did so very well. It was perfect to read it out loud to get the full enjoyment. I related to shutting down my laptop when words refuse to make themselves known. Having the words run through your mind later, demanding to jump out on your screen, happens to me often.

There were some "stutters" while reading when I came upon a comma at the end of the second stanza. I would change that to a period. The first sentence in the next stanza refers back to that last sentence but can stand by itself. That line, "which reminds of a story I saw on the net," feels like the word me should be in there so it "reminds me." I say that because your other sentences are complete with pronouns.

A terrific read for me this evening. Thank you for writing what I think many writers can definitely relate to.

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#4771634

Review of Mother of Mine

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Rated: E

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Hello G.B. Williams,

God works in mysterious ways. I clicked on Read & Review, and this second piece of yours came up! "Mother of Mine" is a fabulous tribute to a wonderful woman I feel I know, after reading your story. What a blessing in your life. It sounds like she succeeded instilling in you everything she taught, most importantly praying every day. Personally, I had a near death experience and went to Heaven. I know that she wanted to reach you to be sure you are getting along okay. You know how we mothers are. We aren't truly happy unless we are worrying about one or another of our children.

There was a little typo you may want to correct to have a flawless piece. "My daughter call's me" needs the apostrophe removed.

My faith is restored over and over as I am given the privilege to read about the lives of others. Thank you for talking about so many wonderful lessons your mom taught to you. She sounds like she could have been unfiltered, but in a way that kept her true to her beliefs. That is something wonderful to have as a memory. Write on!

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#4771633

Review of Reflections on ME

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Rated: E

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Hello G.B. Williams,

Your work "Reflections on ME!" came up under Read & Review. How lucky I am to have had the privilege to read it. I liked the confidence you showed with your testimony. You use positive words making emphasis on important words with capital letters, as you did in your title. "His lord said unto him, Well done, good and faithful servant; thou hast been faithful over a few things, I will make thee ruler over many things: enter thou into the joy of thy lord." Matt 25:23 (KJV). I thought of this verse immediately.

There is one small typographical fix needed in the expression "serve other" needs an s at the end.

Surprising to me, not you I would suspect, is the notion that if God is purported to be dead then He must have lived. That was my favorite part. My wish is for ongoing good health for you in order to keep on the service which you are meant to perform.

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#4771629

Review of Tidbits of Experience

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Rated: E

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Hello William,

Welcome to WdC. It is great to have you join our fine community. Our main focus is to read and review each other's work, giving impressions of your work. I found you by searching for the genre poetry. I looked at the genres you selected before reading and noticed it is satirical, even comical. My impression it is actually quite insightful. The analogy to the ducks gave me a good idea what you meant to convey. As we get older, we can move away from the crowd and observe rather than be in the midst of the crowd. That is something I related to. The other poems say they are in your book. Rather than read them here, I have your book now in my Kindle Cloud Reader so I can enjoy them all as time permits.

From a reader's perspective, I would remove the hyphens. It made me stop and interrupted the flow.

A relative of mine went to Montreal and enjoyed fois gras. Thanks for sharing your work. I see you have a couple of reviews already. I sneaked a peek at your book collection. I like what I am reading. Thanks for the shoutout about how to find it.

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#4771626

Review of Forever a 1990's kid

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Rated: E

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Hello Drew,

I searched for biographical poetry and your poem "Forever a 1990's kid" popped up. Reading it gave me a glimpse at what a wonderful childhood you had. Your memories reminded me of the things you pointed out. I like the way you write in free verse. You are able to be free with the way you remember and list the things that gave you great joy.

I noticed there are a couple of things missed in editing. "Saturdays is always a adventures." I think you meant it is always "an adventure." In the line there was " All that ", As if- There needs to be quotation marks "As if." Mcdonalds should be McDonalds. I was puzzled about the rough start you mentioned at the beginning. I was hoping there would be more about that.

Wouldn't it be cool to go back and be young like that for a day, even a few hours to recapture that feeling. I enjoyed reading this. I actually read every poem in your portfolio. Each had something to say, a message that was supported by experience or beliefs. Good job!

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#4771183

Review of Daily Flash Fiction Challenge

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Rated: 13+

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Hello Arakun,

After some time as a member, and hearing about flash fiction, I took the time to come check out to see what the requirements are for writing a piece for this type of story. I like that the word count is comparatively low. The prompt allows for any number of stories. I especially liked the caveat about sad stories. I have a little story cooking in my brain and plan to participate for August. I know how much time you volunteer to run the event day by day with the help of worthy judges. Good luck with carrying the group on for what appears to be ongoing for twenty years.

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#4770928

Review of The Alabaster Doe & The Amber Wolf

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Rated: 13+

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Hello Korosu,

Welcome again to WdC. Thanks for asking me to review your story "The Alabaster Doe & The Amber Wolf." I have some thoughts to share that I hope you will find helpful.

Initial impression: The genres tells me this is a romance/story and fantasy written for a contest. The KB size told me it was about 3800 words, so I needed some extra time to read. I scanned over it and saw a line break about half way. The site's text size is small.

Content: The story of the Amber Wolf and the Doe is unique and creative. The fantasy of having the doe not die but reveal itself as a demi-human is believable.

Development opportunities: I appreciate your piece is noted as a work in progress. The story plot and character development is wonderful. It is in serious need of editing. One major flaw is the name Hester, according to my online research, is strictly a female's name. It tripped me up because of the famous Hester Primm from "The Scarlett Letter." Along the way the word a is used when it should be an. One other thing to work on is one of the guidelines of a great short story which is to show us your story. You have told us the story with so many details we don't have the chance to imagine scenes, character's feelings, and the like. One example is describing Doe's name as "uncreatively named." I liked the name Doe.

Thanks again for the privilege to read and review your story. I look forward to reading the completed draft. Write on!

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Review of Weekly Poetry Challenge Five

for entry "week one entry as Old Joe Retires"

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Rated: 13+

| (5.0)

Hi Jake,

I am responding to your newsfeed link to "New beginnings as the Old Joe Retires." I have a few thoughts that I hope will resonate with you.

Your free verse style was taken places I never thought possible. You have a comprehensive list of the things invoked. Some of them I had forgotten, but all are the truth. I liked the way you used the large size text. It makes it so much easier for my older eyes to read. I would expect no less than perfection in the mechanical department. The only improvement I would like to say is not to use "Other" for a genre. It does not tell you any good information, and takes away one opportunity for others to read your work. You may think about another category you may to use in its stead, or not. Completely your choice.

A personal comment is you have taken being nice to such overt evil to a whole new level. That is the sign of a great orator/writer.

Write on!
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#4770212

Review of Wise

Review by tracker

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

Hello Bodhisattwa Parekh,

Thank you for requesting a review of your poem "Wise" which I have just read. I have a few thoughts for you that I hope you will find helpful.

It would help to have the picture prompt with your poem, but I can imagine it as well from the description you nicely provided. Hands lifted aloft represent a supplication to a higher being, in this case God. Using an exclamation point at the end of the first two lines emphasized their importance. Where can one turn in times of trouble is the question and you provide an answer, "You pray for help to God."

In the lines, "That situation occurs, Almost every life" as stated feels unnatural. The is transition word. I would change "almost" to "In every life." The word "almost" casts doubt for some who may not believe in a God or otherwise worship differently. The word almost negates the point you are making that, as I understand it, in every life there are situations which can be made better by asking for God's help.

The free verse is conducive to what you wanted to convey. I would have liked to see it in some sort of poem pattern with rhymes to direct the reader's path.

Thanks again for the privilege of reading and reviewing your poem. Write on!

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Review of Colorful Love Life

Review by tracker

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Rated: 13+

| (4.5)

Hello Ginger R,

Welcome to our fabulous community. I am honored to be asked to review your chapter book. Our focus is to read and review each other’s work. I have read “Colorful Love Life” and have some thoughts to share. These are only my opinions. I hope they will resonate with you.

First impression: I look at the title, rating, genre, and description first. One of my favorite types of writing is autobiographical work. We learn much about people, can relate to experiences, and enjoy an uplifting, inspirational, or life lesson true story.

Content: Your story is constructed in a manner that from the strong hook about discussing things you mostly don’t want to talk about I was all in. The first paragraph told me what you would discuss and why it was important for me to read on. I liked the way, after the introductory paragraph, your story was written chronologically. Throughout, I learned much needed information about your parents and their parenting style. There are stereotypes in all ethnicities. I am not sure all are aware of the others.

One of the important ways to get exposure to your work is by the genres you choose. I suggest you remove “other” because regular readers can access genres they enjoy reading through our search function. I can almost guarantee not many check that category. You also want to choose all three genres available to you. This is most assuredly “inspirational.” There are a lot of choices. As time goes on, you will be accustomed to them and see what genres are noted in the pieces you read. It would help if you do another edit for a couple of typos and punctuation concerns.

Bravo on a wonderfully written story. The subject matter is important and the happy ending provided by Mr Ginger R was a welcome reward at the end of the story. Keep writing. I will keep reading!

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