This chapter was very....engaging? I... truth be told, I had no idea what you were trying to convey or where these extra characters came from but it made the chapter very disjointed. I won’t go into grammar or spelling because English might not be your first language but I would run it through a word processor and smarten it up a bit.
Genuinely speaking, I was not impressed with this chapter. The grammar was hard to read and I could barely understand what you were trying to get out. I’m not sure if English is your native language, but I would suggest proofreading in a word processor in English or getting a beta reader.
Overall, an E for effort but your writing can always improve.
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