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11 Public Reviews Given
11 Total Reviews Given
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I love reading so I also love reviewing. I`m not going to pick you up on grammer - unless there is something in there that unintentionally interrupts the flow. The grammar is your own my interest is in the content.
Favorite Genres
DARK PARANORMAL
Public Reviews
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Review of Unexpected  Open in new Window.
Review by timwinckle Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Hi, this is a very good story. The way my mind worked as I began to read it is as follows: First few lines, "Hmm! not sure!", after the next few, as the subject went out in the snow, I thought - "ok, I can see the way this is going". I carried on reading and then all my preconceptions disappeared, the story had dragged me in and I was desperate to find out what was going to happen.
This is a very well written story and one that, as I have said, hooks the reader in until they feel the conditions and the atmosphere that something is going to happen - but there is no indication of what. And the finale? Superb!
A brilliant piece, I look forward to reading more of your work.
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Review of Marie Maria  Open in new Window.
Review by timwinckle Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 18+ | (3.0)
A good poem. Simple - yet for me somehow lacks an easy, flowing rhythm. Having said that I love the feeling behind it the longing and the lust of the (as yet) unobtainable. I wonder if there will be a sequel, where the watcher finally saves up the money to obtain his desire - I wonder if he will still feel the same "afterwards" or will his desire move towards something else he can't have?
Hope you don't take this as negative, it is not meant to be - I enjoyed it. .
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Review by timwinckle Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi, I like this a lot. Simple yet factual weaving the authors ideas into a nice rhythmic story that flows nicely. I love the idea of the two celestial deities being so close and yet so far. It is simple (in the nicest sense of the word), easy on the eye and the imagination, causing the reader (or me at least) to visualise a sky on the horizon where the sun and moon dance out their eternal relationship. Not a criticism, but just a thought - the first verse has 4 lines, each verse 3 lines thereafter - I wonder if a final verse of 4 lines to mirror the first would bring the piece to a natural close? As it stands, and purely for the layout not the content the first verse being different from rest makes the poem feel there should be more to come? (if you see what I mean)? Anyway that aside, a great poem - a fine, feelgood piece of work. Well done! If If you have entered this in the contest already - then I hope it does well - if you are still to enter it - then I wish you every success.
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Review by timwinckle Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
WOW! I love this poem! So original, so structured. Fabulous work! Can't wait to read more
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Review of The Luring  Open in new Window.
Review by timwinckle Author IconMail Icon
Rated: ASR | (3.0)
I like this poem. It is delightfully obscure leaving the reader to wonder what the subject is seeking. Although that is not a discouragement - it is probably just me. The verses are well structured and trip off the tongue, a good "reading aloud" poem although I wonder if the subject matter could be enhanced with some more lines that break up the regimented form by shorter rhythm building again to the finale verse just to add a bit of "insecurity" by breaking up the rhythm throughout?
Having said that, it IS a fine poem, good use of words and rhymes
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