This piece is genius. You sir are quite a poet. This piece is powerful and inspiring. I love your word selection and the flow is like a roller coaster of words that is fun to read. Short and to the point with a punch in face defiance. Keep up the good work. This is some good writing! TEP
This is a sad and beautiful piece. The form is easy to read and straight forward. I feel for person and I can identify as I had a wife who left me. We did love each other and I felt the same way as she left. I found no spelling errors. I feel like you speak from experience here and that's always the best motivation for pieces such as this. Keep up the good work. TEP
I love the haiku nature you have chosen here. It is such an abstract point of view and is quite refreshing in it's absurdity. It was not until the IV or V haiku that I realized what you were doing. It was at that point that I really enjoyed your work. I will admit that the doubt I had in the piece was, at just the right moment, salvaged by the genius lunacy that I happened to notice. I like this piece and find it comical and mirthful.
As for a deeper meaning I truly feel there is not one. I conclude the piece was written simply for amusment and shock value. I may be wrong but I don't want to be one of those people who can find meaning in everything. I understand that some things in this life are purely entertainment and should be revered as such.
Haiku's are a vast world to play in. I implore to read the wiki article about them http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Haiku I don't know hoq seriuos you are about them but I found it an interesting read.
This is a very mature piece for a 14 year old gal. I am impressed and taken by your maturity and pain you have already experienced so young in life. I am going thru a divorce after 5 years of marriage and I can tell you I know your pain. I identify with you on a lot of levels here. I like your style and I hope you keep writing. It's a good outlet.
This is truly a sad and moving piece. The flow is wonderful and the words are chosen perfectly. You convey your feelings well in this piece. Their is a lesson to be learned with in this, about taking things for granted, or realizing the worth of something after it is gone. Even sort of a ironic theme in that you have to lose something for it's true effect and purpose to take place in your life. The first four lines are the reason I feel this way:
"Showing me truth in who I am
Not seeing it before..but now I can
Realizing after the fact seems to be the norm
Bringing on new meaning..a whole new form"
You do an excellent job of opening this piece with a realization. The pace of the poem holds the reader and delves into a mournful time that is exalted by the fact that the event hurt and helped you at the same time. These moments in life that many have a hard time understanding, why things happen, why they happen to us, are rarely dealt with in such a manner. Finding the reason in these such events is the pinnacle of humanity. More often then not, understanding is lost and all that is left is anger toward the situation.
Thank you for this piece, it shows me that there can be hope in loss. Keep up the good work. Happy new year.
This piece is very good. Very sad and contemplative. With the ending realization to finally put a stop to what is causing the remorse and pain, I feel this piece to be inspirational, in that it should give hope to women in abusive relationships the courage to say "get out of my life".
Everything flowed well with good rythym. I saw no spelling errors. I enjoyed reading this piece, it made me feel a wide range of emotions from anger, to desperation, to relief.
This is a great piece. Having a daughter myself I can relate to it. It flows pretty well and word usage is easy for the reader.
Good title, very fitting. This piece is very emotional and inspirational. I really enjoyed reading it and it has inspired me to write my daughter a poem, which I have been thinking about anyway.
Keep up the good work. I love to read your poems.
P.S. I know my reviews aren't very good, but I am still figuring out my style. ^_^
Absolutely moving piece. This made me sad but at the same time gave me great inspiration. Knowing that someone could be in a such torment, such pain, yet they still trust and pray for God to heal and make whole. Like a modern day Job.
Your piece flows well and captures the reader. I saw no spelling errors.
Keep up the good work, and if it's ok with you, I would like to keep you in my prayers.
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