very nice poem. getting back your in your unseen writer groove isn't easy. I myself have been in a black hole with no way out. I have been using books to regain my love for reading and telling stories.
I really enjoyed the story. It's a very interesting idea of a train to heaven. If you changed anything maybe describe the things seen better. The shadows on the train could be fleeting faces of people left behind. Only suggestions honestly this was very well written.
never heard of this way of writing but it does flow well and I find it interesting. they say that sometimes friends are more special than family in special ways.
I really enjoyed the poem. It's not a easy life when you wear your heart on your sleeve but it's a great way to live and learn about everything. keep up the great work.
okay so Idea, how about a female wizard. something different from other stories. Maybe gets surprised by a chance meeting with a female fighter or thief. You could make the whole story surrounding the problems that females would face beside males.
very well written and very interesting to read. the story really sticks out and draws the reader in. The gods and the many worlds could be described in another story. follow each god in his or her realm and a full description of each.
Interesting way to describe the problems of today with a wider spin on them. It’s been a very long haul and things are slowly getting to normal. I really enjoyed the story and look forward to reading more of your writing.
well done. It's true that fur babies are a blessing and animals love you no matter what unless you harm them. Many people have proven they don't deserve the unbiased love of a animal and many have loved lots of animals until they cross the rainbow bridge.
fantastic story. well done. keeps the reader on the edge the whole way. the past always has a hold on the future and remembering those who gave everything so we can be here today is special.
the light is different for everyone and everyone has a right to view it however they want. keep up the good work and don't let anyone stop you from doing what you believe. Poems or stories always depend on how much you want to believe in yourself and where the light takes you.
very interesting. it flows good but does leave a few questions to be answered. What kind are you talking about and why would reporters be looking or waiting for you ?
very interesting. I enjoy the different view of the things we see in the world. Where some see little bugs and those with imagination see so much more in the world.
very interesting. sounds like you would make a great coach to youngsters and anyone who wants to reach their full potential. Adjusting visions and knowing what you are capable of can help anyone with everything in their life.
I really enjoyed this story. It's one of life's hardest questions. do you take the chance and possibly lose both or do you deal with everything now and lose only one with the option to adopt. it's never easy making that kind of decision and I don't know if I could make the choice either.
A valiant way to die. many people have died in wars and I hope they also had pictures of their loved ones in mind as they felt their last breath leave their bodies.
interesting yet dark look at life and if it's worth living. It is very possible to make changes if your willing to try. those who refuse to try will sooner or later be lost and give into the darkness. Life offers chances for change every day and all you need to do is look.
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