This is the kind of story I'd read, enough detail in some parts to get the point, but not too much that I get bored and skip over some parts of it. Though, I would describe some more parts, such as the leprechauns, the boss's face, and more about Gilbert. It's really funny though, thanks for sharing.
The detail in this is just marvelous, it has many qualities of a good poem. Personally, I think it isn't very short at all. Some poems are just a few words! I have a question though... is this a roller coaster? I'm not too sure, but the end kind of felt like they were riding one. It was very good though, the descriptions and metaphors were great.
This poem, to me, is very mysterious. I can't entirely get the whole concept, but it's enough detail to get a part of it. Your poems are really beautiful, this one has beautiful vocabulary, I look forward to more from you!
Whoa... this poem just blew me away! I normally love rhyming poems more than... non-rhyming poems, but this one has so much detail, and the description of the net is a lot of description, without going overboard. I actually believe the feelings, I can feel them along with you. That was fantastic, deserved 5 stars to me.
This is just so heartfelt in that sort of way... I'm sorry for your experience, I hope everything turned out alright. I do think you should add more about your father, than just saying strong and amazing. While these are nice words, I'm sure you can use better ones to describe your father, so I can really feel what you feel. It's touching though, so sweet.
The first thing that came to mind, was, what whisper of a name? I'm not too sure of what that means in the story. If you intend it to be that mysterious, then I'm alright with that. However, I additionally don't understand how you can "feel" beauty. What type of beauty, and how do you feel it? This was very good though, the detail/description of all of the sights and people are simply amazing. The metaphors you used were great too. I do recommend you add some action, you add a lot of dialogue. I did enjoy reading it though, keep up the spectacular work!
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