I had to smile reading this. This remained me of my first story written in my school days when I was a little kid, for a short story competition. It was a bit similar to this one. However; I made it suspense at the end saying, "I didn't know what happened next in this story since my mom woke me up before the dream has completed". To be honest, my imagination ended up before I could give the climax to the story.
Thank you so much for sharing this story. Good luck! Keep writing!
This story was pure Fire!!! Nice creative work. And the tagline,
"Behind the mask lies the truth" draws the attention! I enjoyed reading it till the end. the story flow is so good without any confusion. Easily understandable with consistent punctuation and grammar leaving the reader undistractable.
So beautifully written. Especially the lines,
"Petals fall gently
perfume faint, light
subtly changing
from bold and bright". Simply Awesome!
You made sure your readers see the things you feel with your poetry. I really appreciate your work from the bottom of my heart. Good luck! keep writing.
I should say, this reminded me of my good old days. All the words are well fabricated. I can see you pouring your heart into your words. Especially the lines, "Soon the students' stomachs will be tied in knots,
And they'll be feeling like they're drawing lots" seasoned your whole work. Good work!
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