I think you did a good job here. The words are full of hope and dreams for a better life. It is very descriptive in how one can be caught up in depression,but then, they can change their life around for the better,
Thank you for sharing this with me.
This poem has great potential. With a little more corrections in spellind and punctuation,I bet it will do just fine in the ratings.
I like the way you try to put a positive message in this about one being self reliant.
This is good.
I would like to say welcome to WDC. You are going to like it here. Drop by and say hello any time.
Wow, this was an amazing story.
It made me laugh all the way through espescially the part about the arms flying off!!
I know what you are saying.
You know how to make RFID's hilariously funny and scary at the same time.
Keep up the good work!
Very strong words, nicely written.
I found one error on the line:
"One sits striped of everything and taunted"
I believe the word should be "stripped"
but that is just my opinion.
Thank you for sharing this.
I am new here, but I like your writing and will check back.
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