First of all, I want to say that this poem really touched me. It is very well written and I could feel the emotion you had writing this poem. Of course I don't know any backstory about what happened, but I still think that this is a very good poem. The only thing I did not like as much is the word 'prolongedly.' It's a difficult word, and I had the feeling it didn't fit in the poem. Good job!
Damn, That was a good poem. It needs some work, but most of it is good. I hope that this isn't your life, and if it is, suicide is never the answer. I've been there and I'm never going back. I like the mysterious way in the beginning. The sentence about the rope, gun or knife made that effect go away. I would recommend you to stay mysterious, but open enough so people know what it is about. I read it three times just to let it hit my mind, and I don't do that often. I don't like poems but yours was absolutely awesome.
Keep on writing!
Jack
I really liked this story. I'm 15 years old and when I was younger I had the same dream. I thought ice cream truck drivers were awesome. Well, thanks to your story that dream is over. I was smiling while reading your story. I showed this story to my mom and she really liked it as well. The reason I don't give 5 stars is that I think the story is a bit to short. I know it is supposed to be, but you could describe some things a bit better. Like the competitiveness from other drivers. I can't imagine the things ice cream truck drivers would do to each other. I would love to read about that.
Jack
This was a great plea. I recognize what you are saying. This is quite a coincidence because I need to make a plea for school (I'm in 4th grade in a Dutch school) so I was wondering if I could use your plea. I'm giving you some points (I just started so I don't have many) If you allow it I hope you can send me an email.
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