Wonderful! You introduced the players and set things up nicely. I wonder why I feel that Admiral McCoy is going to try everything in his power to win that bet ... The epic of yours looks likes it's going to be a lot of fun.
You covered a lot of ground with this article. Amazing how many of the themes, settings, and plot devices that the online comic Girl Genius has yet is soo much fun to read.
Outstanding read! You made me smile when John found out that he was socially invisible and a larger smile when he found out what that meant. You build the story one layer at a time till you spring the ultimate hacking job on the World. After that the logical extensions of the G-net to the bitter end of the remaining population because of the ultimate computer virus.
This story had me laughing so much that my cat moved to another room to get some quiet. I guess that we all know a Jake and have had some similar events happen to us. In fact, I have a great offer for you. I have this land that, after the tide goes out and the alligators leave, would ... Just having some fun with ya :) Fun story!
You weave a tale that seems far shorter than it is. I wanted to it to continue because your writing has created a "real" character, Majah, and a World filled with the sights, sounds and smells of a place that I would like to know more of and what happens to Majah now that her Greek lover is gone.
Reading this story made me feel like I was watching a movie, a good sci-fi movie that gives hints and makes the audience think.
Very well done! It has been a while since I've had such a good read. Now if I could only keep your story visable in my browser before it vanishes, I would be happy. I now hit the page source and copy your text so I can read it ofline. Not the best way to read but your story is well worth it. Looking forward to reading more.
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