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Review by Tom Wigmore Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (3.0)
I like the ideas presented in this story. I feel that the character is realistic - to the sense a 12-year-old killer would be - and that he would be intrigued at visiting his childhood. I also like the descriptions used in killing and placing of the bodies; a query of mine would be the emotions of the killer, as he seems very complacent towards killing an eight-year-old girl. There is a massive difference between taking the life of a cat and taking the life of a child.
With such a limited word count there presents a few issues. For example, the characters, bar the killer, are very under-developed. I'm not saying that this is a bad thing, because it allows us to focus on the killer himself, it just provides us with little to no backstory, and therefore makes it difficult to feel sympathy towards characters, for example, the character of Courtney. She's portrayed as a simple girl, which is absolutely fine for what you're trying to achieve. Personally, I'd have made her a more sympathy-driven character to make the audience feel something when she dies. As of yet, it feels detached and cold.
Final point: your spelling and grammar can waver at times. This is just me, personally; I am seriously picky when it comes to it. I'm sure others won't notice it as much as I did, but you can be sure there are mistakes.

Final thoughts: I like the premise, I like the main character. I'd love to see where else he goes. Just... as long as development is increased and the story's provide something new to this.
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