I love the use of the play on words here. Very cleverly written. I would go back and revise some of the punctuation and capitalize the beginning of the sentence but other than that it was a great read!
Wow! What a wonderful story. You captured my attention especially since I'm an October baby and love October. Good job, love to see more of your stories, you've inspired me to try writing stories instead of just poetry...THANKS!
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