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Review of Lost  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
I absolutely loved this poem. Keep up the good work!
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Review of Stay  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
One word: amazing. I absolutely loved this poem. Your presentation was so powerful and raw. I can tell that the implied author of this poem shares a love with this girl that is not a new love, perhaps an old, lasting love, and it is one of those loves that the feelings do not fade over time but rather grow stronger: true love. I enjoyed this poem very much and I look forward to reading more of your work!
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Wow, this was perfectly written! Even just picking up this scene randomly, I already felt intrigued by the characters. Keep up the great work!
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Review of Gravity  Open in new Window.
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
This was an amazing story! Unlike the things I write similar to this, it wasn't completely awkward at all! :P
This is really incredible. I could feel the emotion leaking from the words! Believe it or not, I only caught one mistake in the whole story.

Errors:
-For hours, I replayed the conversation in my mind, trying to force myself to understand and cried silent tears. (I believe that this should be phrased "and crying silent tears", because in the beginning of the sentence, you used "trying" instead of "tried". It's best to match your "-ing's" with "-ing's"!
Ex: "For hours, I replayed the conversation in my mind, trying to force myself to understand and crying silent tears", or "For hours, I replayed the conversation in my mind; I tried to force myself to understand and I cried silent tears".)

Once again, great story! If you have any questions, feel free to private message me!

And also, I checked out your profile; You have GREAT taste in music and books! Have you ever read the Vampire Academy series? It's author is Richelle Mead. Those are my absolute favorite books EVER. I bet you would really enjoy them! *Smile*
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