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Review of Flashing Lights  Open in new Window.
Review by Tonya Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.0)
It must have been a horrifying experience to watch your brother go through this, and I hope you enjoyed your visit with him recently. I've gotten mocked by another person for giving this same advice, however, I feel I must give it again (I learned it in a writing course)- Some stronger and more descriptive words may draw the reader in more. You wrote a very powerful story about Kurt, but I think with some well chosen descriptive words it can really make the reader feel your pain as you witnessed this. Overall though I think you did a wonderful job. God bless :)
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Review by Tonya Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
After my last review I decided to sneak around your profile :) I love this one too. You're very gifted and I hope you keep pursuing writing. If you wouldn't mind and you have the time would you be able to review one of mine? So far I haven't had any hits on either of them.
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
I can agree with a lot of what you have to say...but the Nazi flag is a bit much. It automatically throws me off and tempts me to give a low score. Nazis did soooo much worse than the United States. Every country has its greed and corruption. However, if they pass this implant thing they've been talking about I'll be right there with ya! All in all though it was very well written and the reader can really feel how passionate you are on this particular subject.
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Review of That's you  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
I really like it :) It's very sad, yet compelling.
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Review of Malice  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
This is an odd one for me. I don't know if I love it or hate it lol I like how it's written, but maybe it's the characters I don't like...hm...
I don't understand what the first impression that he can't live up to is. I really like the line- "I could see the sunflower bent over the headstone,
reaching for the dirt."
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