Wow, I absolutely love this! The only part that seemed a little awkward in the way you wrote it was your second paragraph, the last line 'don't you know that' seemed to take away from it and break up the flow. I loved the like 'For I am, I am' absolutely loved it!
I really liked this poem. I love how spiritual your poems are that hits me really close to home, however the last line says 'you're calling me home' it sounds a little depressing, did you mean just calling your spirit to look to heaven or did you mean your spirit leave this world and go home. That had me a little worried, however, everything else is awesome! Keep it up!
I really like this poem, I agree with this entirely and I know how you feel. I thought that some points weren't very rhythmical, for example the second last line, it stretched on a little long. Also the last line didn't really follow the flow however I know that you were trying to bring the poem to a conclusion so it's not a big deal. Awesome job!
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