Wonderful!! Absolutely wonderfully odd and confusing, but in a good way! :) Keep on writing! The only suggestion I have is that your words are a little overly flamboyant, too expectable. It flows well, but almost well enough that it just doesn't stick as memerable. I particular the phrase "Oh to sing, to sing" seems to average, like a line scheme reused over and over again to the point that way of wording something is anoying. I do like it though.
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