The title of your poem attracted me instantaneously. It's a good attention grabber, and it got me to read your poem. It is interesting, the way you pulled together many different elements and fit them altogether in one piece. I think altogether it is a very amusing and intriguing piece, just the way your title suggests.
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I think you have an interesting storyline, and you've created a scene wherein it is important to capitalise on some character points. The idea of the scene is good, but I think you have to expound more on certain details such as the thoughts that ran through the characters' minds and not just their actions. Also in this scene I think tension is very important, so capitalise on the tension during the conversation at the dinner table.
Apart from that I think this is good. Continue writing and it could lead to something better :)
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