I'll make this review short, as I don't really have too much to say on this, but I'll try my best.
It's a rather basic poem, I'll admit, and even for a freestyle, I don't seem to feel like there's much rhythm to the poem as a whole. However, the feelings are conveyed clearly, especially around the middle area ("I watch, hoping for the best, fearing the worst."). As I leave my own parents, heading off to college, I can understand this emotion even more as I see my parents already starting to go through them.
If the rhythm were a bit more fluid, it'd be a really good poem, and even without it is still pretty solid. Good stuff.
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