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Rated: E | (3.0)
Hi, I like the content of your story. The end leaves me wondering how the story will continue. I could really relate to the character's shy nature.
Yet I do have some issues with the punctuation. In your first line, I would put a period after 'grass', instead of a comma.
And I would put a period after 'because she thought she wasn't good enough', after 'the judges liked only 10 people' and after when they heard her voice'.
Good luck with your writing!
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