This story is lovely. The imagery and emotions that you portray here are very powerful. You have met and experienced some interesting people and your take on them is very fresh. But the message of this piece is ruined by the last paragraph. If you had ended it on the second to last with comparing yourself to the rosebush, it would have been great. But the last paragraph just muddies the message you were trying to send, at least, it did for me.
This story has an excellent premise. I have been lurking on WDC for a while now and this definitely has the potential to be a large and exciting interactive. But you the author need to add more of your own chapters. The story isn't going to write itself and the more chapters you have, the more people will read it and the more will add.
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