Wow! Your story is really captivating! I want to know what happens next! :) I like your flashback. It gives a not-too-detailed but understandable background. I hope you keep writing! I really enjoy mystery, and this is a good one. I thought at the beginning that he was working for some kind of illegal company ;) I like it a lot!
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I really liked your story! I want to know what happens next! I have written a few stories before and they flop on me, but you did a really good job with this!
Nice! I have always liked rhymes. I like how you combined the poem type with the normal everyday language. Usually, poems are flowery and overly so, I like that yours is not. I like your journey through everyday life in rhyme form. "Meanwhile, gusts of wind and rain Often wreak havoc On the virol travellers and their vehicles." Ha! I like this part a lot.
I like this cross-word puzzle. It is harder than I thought it would be. :) Although it is small it is still good. I thought it was going to be easy. :) No such luck. I like that you picked well-known words that everybody will know. It is probably not difficult, but it is hard for me. :)
Interesting! I like your idea. I've heard of dryers eating your socks but this is something new.I like how you give your idea significance and show how it could work. I don't know how big your alien is so I don't know what kind of cage you would need. You might be about the make an Indian trap; you catch the pray's foot in a lasso.
I really like it. Such a good message!You made it clear that your mom meant much to you. I like your challenge. It seems that most Christians aren't joyful most of the time, but a few just seem to have strength to give Him praise in everything. I saw a couple of typos. "I had three brother and four sisters" I think you meant 'brothers'. "I was so frustrate with God" I think you meant 'frustrated'. I really enjoyed your post. It would definitely be hard for me to share something like this with a group of people, especially since I'm an introvert. :)
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