Good little flash fiction. Felt relatable with the part about the boy putting on the headphones to be away from his surroundings. I also like the small reveal at the end.
This feels more like a random facebook or twitter post or maybe a line from a nursery rhyme. I understand what you're trying to get across, and I can relate, but it doesn't really give me anything to go off of or get into.
I like that this poem takes the subject very seriously and doesn't go away from that.
However, I do not like the line "be put to rest beside her coz i wil smile for eternity." The spelling and dialect is radically different from the rest of the poem. I'm sure "wil" was a typo but "coz" doesn't really fit in. "Cause" or "because" would have been better fitting. I also don't the random lower cased I's when they're supposed to always be capitalized by themselves.
The whole "girl in abusive relationship" is so typical in poetry. Nothing really makes this poem stand out any except for the first stanza, which does offer something newer and isn't boring or cliche.
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