Quite a few spelling mistakes, but never the less quite deep. Sometimes helps if you read your story out loud to yourself, (makes it easied to spot those mistakes).
Living in Scotland and frequenting (car boot sales) i found that was able to relate to this story and i quite enjoyed it. There were some minor spelling mistakes And it did seem to drag on, (might have been better if you had broken it into two chapters).
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STORYMAN1
I enjoyed the sentiment but found some mistakes with spelling and pronounciation. For example (A proud Cherokee Indian Warrior (sits),(new with child sits breast feedind (their) child). ALso remember when someone is speaking to add ( " ) before and after. These are simple errors so do not be discouraged, sometimes it helps to read your story out loud to yourself, that way these errors can be spotted before your final print.
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STORYMAN1
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