This is a good story. You have a few mistakes in it, but is a good story idea.
Thanks for sharing,
Stormy
king-sized
rendevous- rendezvous
The remaining two raised there weapons- their
alright- all right
and the chanting was broken, as the rest
The fighting grew more fiercer as ogres
the rear gatehouse{c:red, which
The horse was immediately taken down by arrows--
Arrows immediately took down the horse
the death blow -- one word I think. deathblow
No!" Rowean screamed, as her
As the last of the invaders were chased from the city by the elvin warriors, the (sp) eleven --
As the eleven warriors chased the last of the invaders from the city
And their rule together would be more peaceful than any other of that age would.
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