That was deep and amazing, and indeed very special. Every Woman in this world would die to have a who feels and thinks like you do. Some of us has given up hope that they exist. You have proved us wrong. I guess we have to have patients and look a little harder. And not to dismiss someone so quickly.
Thank You,
To a compassionate Man.
We all do appreciate you.
I love this short story just the way it is. I saw nothing that needed to be changed.
It was interesting and sad at the same time. This made me feel sad for him, that he had missed out on the best thing in the world.
Great Job! Please continue to post or art here so everyone can also enjoy your work. This will also help with getting multiple critiques from others!
1 Question though, are you going to continue this story any further?
That's quite an imagination you have. I loved it, you did and amazing job on this story and it had me deeply involved in the reading. I was eating an ice cream cone and stopped eating completely so that I could concentrate on your story. That's saying something right there.
Great Job, I have no advice to give because you don't need any on this.
I can't wait to read more of your stuff.
Stop in and let me know what you think of mine. I need to let you know though most of my things are poetry.
I really enjoyed that. I have never read a poem about Zombies before so this one was very well written. You kept my interest throughout the entire poem and I really don't see anything that needs any work done to it. Looks Perfect to me. Awesome Job and please keep writing. I can't wait to read more of your work. Good Luck!
This was pretty good, although I would add a little more detail and mystery to it. Also some of the words ran into the punctuation marks and it was a little hard to keep up. You could probably use a little more separation in your lines and sentences to make it easier to read. It would also be cool to have a little spooky picture added to it also.
Otherwise, I think this would make an awesome story.
Good Job, Write On!
Sweet and simple, yet full of passion and emotion. Your words flow very well and I enjoyed this read very much. I can't see anything that needs to be changed, but if you want to you could add some color or some sort of art form, a picture or even a different font type. Or you could do all of that it would bring out more emotion and capture your readers a lot quicker as well.
Great Job!!
This was indeed a great read, and I am honored you allowed me to enjoy your work. I saw nothing that needed editing. It flowed very well and the only thing I would recommend is to maybe add a little art work or a picture that would compliment your words and bring out more emotions. Otherwise, you did a Great Job!
Write On!!!
Whoa that was some story. It captured me from the very beginning, and kept me hanging on to each abs every word. You are a very talented writer. I can't wait to read more of your work. GREAT Job! And GOOD LUCK! If you get a chance stop in and take a look at my portfolio and let me know what you think.
This was very well written. One suggestion I want to give is to may be add some color to your words. Even a piece of art work or picture would make this more eye catching to your readers. Other than that I see nothing that needs changing. Great Job!
This was tremendously good and well written. Capturing me from the start and had me until the end. You are Greatly talented and I can't wait to read more of your work. Encouraging and motivating is the feeling I got as I read through this. Thank you for allowing me to read your work. Nothing needs editing, you did a Great Job!
Your words are very touching and I greatly enjoyed reading your work. I saw nothing that needs editing, it's perfect the way it is. I can't wait to read more of your work. You are very talented, so keep up the good work. Great Job, and Good Luck.
This is very well written and I enjoyed it very much. It's nice to see this point of view from such an empathetic view in writing as poetry. I did not see anything that needed editing. You could think about adding some type of art work or picture to bring out the emotions to be a little stronger. Or even, adding color to your words. Just some suggestions. Good Luck!
As always you are amazing at this. You should keep all your work and make it into a book of sorts. That would be a book I would love to have with all the amazing poetry you have inside. Great Job!
Awe, that was very moving and deep. Your emotions are shown very well in your words. The color and placement of your words are elegant and pleasing to the eyes. Emotions are strong and seen through every letter. You did a Great Job and this needs no editing. I can't wait to read more of your work. Good Luck!
This was a really sweet and romantic read. You put your words together quite well. I Loved it and you have a bright future ahead of you as a writer. You don't need any editing done to it. It is perfect the way it is. If you want you could add a picture or some art work to bring out the expressions of your work. Great Job! Good Luck, and I can't wait to read more of your work.
Wow, this is really amazing and I enjoyed it very much, you are truly a talented writer. I hope you add more to this and I would be honored to read more of your work. I think this could turn out to be a great story. You could capture a readers attention instantly and keep hold of it as well. Great Job!
This was very well written and I enjoyed reading your work. I appreciate the opportunity to read your writing. This is the type of work I really love to read, and I also write poetry myself. So if you get a chance check out my portfolio and let me know what you think. Great Job!
This is really good, I see nothing that needs editing, Although to make it more eye catching you could add a picture or some kind of artwork to give the words a stronger emotion. Otherwise you did a Great Job. I really do love reading your work. It motivates me to keep on writing. Thank you!
"My family could never ask the question of why", this line may need that one word added to be able to understand what it is you were meaning to say. This is the only thing that may or may not need to be edited, it only needs to suit your needs of the feeling you want your readers to receive. I think this is very well written and you are very talented and i can't wait to read more of your work. Great Job and Good luck!
This is a very captivating story. It grabbed me the very first line and held my attention to the end and left me wanting more. You are a very talented writer and I would love to read more of this story from the beginning to the end. There are only a few errors such as misspellings, other than that I see nothing that needs to be added or changed. Great Job, I'm going to look for more of this story now. Thank you for the opportunity to read such a great story. If you get a chance will you check out my portfolio and let me know what you think?
Good Luck!
Wow that was amazing you are a very inspired writer. I enjoyed every aspect of this poem and see nothing that needs editing. I captured me from the beginning and made me feel a past memory, which includes these words to how I feel today. I hope I explained that clearly, but you are talented and I can't wait to read more of your work. Great Job! It's our job as writers to capture I reader and make them feel the words written that we write from our hearts. This you did very well.
This is really good and very well written, there is one word that I think you may have misspelled "witch-which". If I am mistaken and you meant for this to be this way, then I apologize. Otherwise, I loved it and you are very talented. Great Job, and I can't wait to read more of your work. Good Luck!
There was deep emotion and great detail. There is only one error I see that is here "I could not bear to to her", I think you were trying to say" I could not bear to go to her". Otherwise this is very well written and I enjoyed reading this. You did a great Job, and I can't wait to read more of your work. Good Luck!
This is also a great read, and I really enjoy reading your work. Maybe you could add a piece of art work to emphasize your words and how you feel to make it more dramatic. Or even a bold word or two that reflects the total of the feeling for this poem. Just a suggestion, you do what you feel is the best. Again, Great Job!
As I read this I felt a past memory come flooding back and I could feel this pain all over again. You did a great job capturing me from the beginning. I can see you are very talented and could be a Great writer as if you weren't already. I cant wait to read more of your work. Good Luck.
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