Amazing. I really like it. Just dont like that you miss speeled "stormy" it sticks out unfortunately. And its missing a title. I wish i knew what the emotion was.
grammer. the appostrophes are in the wrong place and that is very distracting to me. i didnt under stand it that well. there are a lot of pretty words but besides that i dont like it that much.
i liked it. it was increbly sweet and romantic. i would like it more if you had included what your love for her is like. metaphors and similes. but over all i thoink it was quite nice. keep up the good work. you have great potential.
change "woods" to "wood". i dont like it much. i don't like the way it is worded. better word structure and better vocabulary and i believe that it would have had a deeper meaning. "frigid" is a nice word. i like the story itself. i just dont like the way it is told.
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