Lovely.
I thought the subject was endearing; unity.
It read easily with natural flow. I felt there was a good pattern and use of ending ryme.
Hope this helps?
I think the last line of the first stanza brought together with ending line underlined the meaning.
"I no longer stand alone.that together we are strong."
Light and Inspiration.
Stillwaters.
Short, sharp and to the point.
For me, I like the way the beginning reinforces the end.
A vision of death; the ultimate goal.
They tie together in a very clever way.
Good use of ending ryme and pattern.
Keep writing.
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