Very pretty, in a fragile sort of way. Love the ghostly imagery of the airborne cotton, and the deeply personal feel of the snapshots of past experiences you evoke for us. This piece is very fluid and wistful, which is a nice counterpoint to the fragmented, non-linear narrative. Being very picky, I'd like to see the rhythm tweaked slightly in some places. 'I am all ages...' through to 'read while sleeping' flows perfectly, but the words seem to choke themselves in a few other places (though that could just be me).
Thanks for an engaging read.
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