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Review by Sung'manitu
Rated: E | (5.0)
I apparently don’t know a lot about 5e. It was still a well constructed quiz,
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Review of Old T.V Shows  
Review by Sung'manitu
Rated: E | (4.0)
Mostly good- though I would change the Happy Days question from American cafe to soda shop, or better still, Al’s/Arnold’s. And the question with Leave It To Beaver and Dennis the Menace could have gone either way%
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Review by Sung'manitu
Rated: E | (5.0)
He’s one humble bumble! Fun and nostalgic quiz.
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Review by Sung'manitu
Rated: E | (5.0)
Love this quiz! On a side note, yellow roses are also the “national” rose of Texas!
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Review of Second Chance  
Review by Sung'manitu
Rated: E | (4.5)
I would add young adult (18-22) to the mix
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Review by Sung'manitu
Rated: E | (5.0)
Nice mix of time periods. I haven’t thought about Captain Caveman for the longest time!
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Review of Pooh vs. Yogi  
Review by Sung'manitu
Rated: E | (4.5)
Well- this was a straight forward poll. Possibly the only thing I would like to see is your reasoning to narrow it down betweeen these two bears!
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Review of Tomorrow  
Review by Sung'manitu
Rated: E | (5.0)
Carpe diem! I love the optimism and determination reflected in your poem!
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Review by Sung'manitu
Rated: E | (5.0)
A well thought out and well written addition to a genre that is overpopulated with cliches, which your tale definitely wasn’t!
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Review by Sung'manitu
Rated: E | (5.0)
I enjoyed this search immensely. I found the most efficient way to solve it was to go after the smaller words. I would invariably stumble across the larger phrases. My only suggestion would be to use 'kindness' rather than 'kindess.' Also, some of your phrasing choices made me wonder if you were using either a NIV or a NKJV bible. That's just idle curiosity on my part, though.
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Review by Sung'manitu
Rated: E | (5.0)
I had only recently read about the origin of the word "hillbilly." Thanks for expanding on that.

On a side note, quite a few Cherokee and Creek war leaders had Scottish blood.
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Review by Sung'manitu
Rated: E | (5.0)
Though I'm not a poet myself, I do love holiday poetry. A splendid idea!
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Review by Sung'manitu
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Very enjoyable concept for an interactive. I'm enjoying adding to it.
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Review by Sung'manitu
Rated: E | (5.0)
A very fun and timely puzzle!
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Review by Sung'manitu
Rated: E | (5.0)
Fun poll with a decorative header. Thanks for sharing!
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Review by Sung'manitu
Rated: E | (4.5)
An enjoyable little poll, though I would have either included "Other" as a choice, or worded the question to include "of the four movies listed below," or words to that effect..
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Review of Christmas Trivia  
Review by Sung'manitu
Rated: E | (5.0)
Nine months until Christnas, and this little quiz still put me in the holiday spirit. Very nicely done!
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Review by Sung'manitu
Rated: E | (5.0)
I would have added "either 2nd or 3rd person" as a choice, but otherwise good poll. I appreciate the examples of each perspective
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Review by Sung'manitu
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
A fun and eclectically enjoyable interactive
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Review by Sung'manitu
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
I enjoy reading and adding to an interactive that I enjoy, though I tend to pass over those that have in their description "Please Add," or some variation thereof. So using an "In and Out" seems a good way to advertise and keep the advertised contents "fresh" by keeping them circulated. Great idea!
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Review by Sung'manitu
Rated: E | (5.0)
So my first question is, did Joe actually use the word 'gravid?' Is that a word snake breeders use to describe their pregnant snakes. Otherwise, this was a captivating tale!
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Review by Sung'manitu
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
First of all, I did appreciate the informative link at the bottom.

My only two suggestions is perhaps some kind of change in the first stanza, in the line "the age of humanity." When I read your poem out loud, to me this was a rhythmic stumbling block.

And the use of the article "the" when referring new ages and epochs seems a little too detached. When I read out loud and substituted "this" for "the," it gave me a sense of immediacy and made me own the responsibility for the situation.

But I still loved your poem.
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Review by Sung'manitu
Rated: E | (5.0)
A very thoughtful contest, and a reminder that we should reach out to others during the Holy Days
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Review by Sung'manitu
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
I loved the imagery and the emotions you evoked in this story in this telling. If I were to make one change (and it almost seems blasphemy to even suggest that, particularly after your superb ending), it would be with one sentence:

The fan moans with every pass, flickering shadows while the incandescent light baths the room in a dull, yellow glow. I can see the image you are creating, but for some reason the phrase 'flickering shadows' just seems very awkward here, but I am afraid I can't suggest something better.

But otherwise, I must applaud you for a very well written piece of prose.
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Review by Sung'manitu
Rated: E | (5.0)
From my point of view, I find nothing inherently wrong with getting a tattoo other than, as you state, if it turns other away from our Creator. The Jewish people are a special case, since the mitzvah against tattoos for them is a commandment that separates them from other people, since they are the people who are bringing Torah to humanity.

Other than that one elaboration, I thought you did well in presenting your viewpoint, and the research that helped you reach your viewpoint. Probably the one editing I might do is mentioning a particular ethniticity when arguing in favor of tattoos.
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