The structure seemed a bit off at times, and I didn’t know if your verses being disjoined was intentional or not. I loved the sentiment and imagery invoked.
I enjoyed the narrative immensely, but there were a few grammatical errors. Two which I would bring up are:
1) First sentence has a comma before the second ‘and.’ Easiest fix to this would be to eliminate the second ‘and,’ then make a second sentence. It also gets rid of a run-on sentence.
2) In the second paragraph, you use ‘buggy’s,’ which is a possessive. You should use ‘buggies’ instead.
Mostly good- though I would change the Happy Days question from American cafe to soda shop, or better still, Al’s/Arnold’s. And the question with Leave It To Beaver and Dennis the Menace could have gone either way%
I enjoyed this search immensely. I found the most efficient way to solve it was to go after the smaller words. I would invariably stumble across the larger phrases. My only suggestion would be to use 'kindness' rather than 'kindess.' Also, some of your phrasing choices made me wonder if you were using either a NIV or a NKJV bible. That's just idle curiosity on my part, though.
An enjoyable little poll, though I would have either included "Other" as a choice, or worded the question to include "of the four movies listed below," or words to that effect..
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