I knew more than half the words listed here, so I gave myself an oat in the back!
The selection of words not only caught my eye and interest, but also don’t immediately pop out at you when doing the word search, making it more challenging. So I have nothing to be persnickety about in this review! Excellent job!
This was an intriguing poem. Putting a riddle in extended verse is almost Tolkieneswue, and very well done at that. I appreciate the change in the rhyming scheme in the second to last stanza, as you reach your conclusion. The only line where I find myself tripping over the rhythm of the poem, rather than going with the flow, is in the last line of the third stanza: You‘ll find him be. I don’t have a suggestion to improve it, but it still doesn’t seem to fit. Otherwise, great job!
This was a fascinating read. Your insertion of facts and observations by Dakota were seamless. My only problem, and it really wasn’t a problem, is when Dakota muses on what it must have been like in the Carboniferous and Devonian. Throughout the story, Dakota is solidly in the here and now (neat trick for a time traveler). So I was little thrown off by that reflection.
My favorite line is easily They’re swimming in it.
There were a handful of names I didn’t recognize, which actually added to the fun, at least for me. Good selection of individuals, which created a large matrix and challenging searches. Also, a very good introduction to your word search. Very well done!
The rhythm and rhyming are good, with a natural flow (no pun intended). I appreciate the narrator’s stance that Nature is not a distinct, disconnected entity from the rest of us.i also appreciate the call to “Let a thousand plants take root
in place of each single felled tree.” Job well done!
I love this sentimental prose. For some reason, it seems (probably just to me) that if the third and fourth lines were made one line, it would flow better. But other than that, I see nothing else I would change on this.
I have only recently discovered the dizain form, and I am shamelessly fascinated by it. You observed all the structural requirements of the form, and beautifully expressed the Good News while doing so. Excellent job!
This was a remarkable and captivating tale. The presentation and dialogue were reminiscent of Lord Dunsany’s The Charwoman’s Shadow. All I can say is Brava!
There were some minor err.ors involving capitalization, others vs other’s, things like that. I also think the story would be better presented with spacing between the paragraphs. But otherwise, a very intriguing and compelling story.
Today I was in a mood for a classical Shakespearean sonnet, and you absolutely delivered. Form, rhythm and rhyme were all there.
I’m curious about the first and third lines of the third stanza, as I am sure there is a personal story there that escapes me. But all in all, I thoroughly enjoyed reading this.
Spotted a few misspellings and grammatical errors (‘person’s experiences’, instead of ‘persons experiences’ and ‘Worse yet’: not ‘worse yet’ and ‘the puppy,’ not ‘the pupy’). In the last paragraph, I would have put ‘I think I was in second grade’ in parenthesis.
That said, it was an interesting, reflective essay, that was very thought provoking.
5-7-5 form observed. You know, i remember hearing the term ‘Derecho’ for the first time years ago, during a weather briefing. Having had to live and work with/around strong weather phenomena all my life. So this brief but pointed poem spoke to me.
You know you’ve crossed a benchmark when you fall down and the reaction isn’t laughter, but people asking if you’re okay. I’m not quite sure why you repeated “pitch” twice, but otherwise a good chuckler, as long as I stay upright!
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