That was amazing. I love the plot twist at the end. It wasn't really a plot twist more like a realization. Anyways, my favorite lines were, "feeling serene enough to share my serenity with another," They flowed nicely and rolled off my tongue beautifully! Please continue to amaze the world with your wonderful thoughts and words.
That was amazing. Not at all how I thought it would be like. Most poems that are like this one talk about how strong they are to still be alive and how their life is harder than anyone else's. But this poem says how your life is hard but you love it that way and wouldn't change it. My favorite stanza is the last one because it seems like the poem is now revealing that it is kind of directed to someone in particular. Or maybe not, who knows? It's your poem, and an excellent one at that.
I don't really like poems like this one but it was excellent. It was beautifully worded. If I had to pick a favorite lines I would pick the fourth stanza. The flow from stanza to stanza I think wasn't quite good, I would describe it as choppy. But I think that it, in a way, made the piece better.
This poem is absolutely amazing!! You are obviously very skilled in writing poetry. How did you get the poem to flow so easily? I read it out loud and all the words just go together and roll off the tongue nicely. I love the lines, "And i became thoroughly consumed By your radiant and lustrous beauty." Also the line, "That neverending road of grace and inspiration" puts a good feeling in my mouth. I think that this poem is beautiful. It is a little short but completely makes up for it by having such great descriptive words! I just wanted to let you know that I became thoroughly consumed by this poem's radiant beauty. :) Please continue to bring happiness to people with your words.
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