Hi. Found you on the sci-fi/fantasy review exchange and thought we could swap reviews. I have a short excerpt from a novel that I want to write on there right now. Its called The Vamp Six. Take a look at it when you get a chance.
Positives:
-Cool setting for a dragon story. I like the concept of blending a futuristic underwater hunting ground with a traditional fantasy creature like a dragon.
-Your story hits its stride almost immediately, and the action is fast and tight.
-Great line about "Dragons being the only species...to cook their food".
-Nice move with the final bit, the addenum has a solid impact.
-Grammar looks good.
Negatives:
-Honestly couldn't really find any. You might want to give a little more explanation as to why the dragons are so valuable.
Hi. I liked the light hearted feel of what you've done so far, and you've created two likable characters. I also got a kick out of the little twist with the bunny in the end. I think with these two, you have a good basis for a full length adventure. If you've got some time, take a look at my first posting called "The Vamp Six", its a possible excerpt from a novel I'd like to write.
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