Hmm, very interesting. Based on the picture you included, I'm guessing you based this poem off of it. The imagery was very interesting. With regards to that the only thing I'd want is for you to go even further with it. The flow of the poem was good, which isn't always easy when writing a free form piece. Although it could be improved by making sure you only repeat words with intentional repetition. The last stanza I loved. It changed the entire interpretation with the last line and reframed the poem. When I went back and read it again I looked at it in that context and gained even more. I thoroughly enjoyed reading your work. 9/10
Hey there, I found this really interesting, and surprisingly realistic. I think you did a really good job with the wording it seemed to flow very nicely. At the beginning in the first and second paragraph there were a few places where I thought first time readers, including myself, could get a little confused, but overall I had a clear view of what was going on. I think you did a really good job on this challenge and was wondering if you'd maybe take a look at my work, I only have one piece out right now. I'd really value your opinion. If not it's completely fine, I just read your work and saw a really competent author. Good job, keep up the awesome writing.
-Mariella
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