I thought this was a very tightly structured and organised story, which contributed to the tense mood, and I really liked the line 'like a modern Pompeii every living thing had been frozen in time during their last moment as an ash statue'. The description of the plane crash was clear as well, I could picture it easily.
I think that there is potential for developing at least the character of Mark, I felt that none of the characters were really developed and I didn't find myself caring what had happened to them, or hoping for survival. I cared more about the nameless people in Moscow who had been killed. At the end it kind of slips into listing a lot of characters, but as I hadn't met any of them it just felt like a list of names to me.
There's also a couple of spelling mistakes and typos, but I found that they didn't detract that much from the actual reading of the story, just something to look at :)
Overall I enjoyed your story very much, just think some development on the characters would give it a bigger impact! :)
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