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Rated: 13+ | (3.0)
Hi Amalinah!
I have to say that I really like the premise of your story! I've always had a weakness for chicks who kick booty! However, the pacing seems to be going too quickly. Starting off with the job is great, and it draws you into the story line, however, the tension needs to be elevated. What is the assasin thinking about, what is the motivation behind her actions? Does she feel anything? I would love to hear how it turns out. Solarblue
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