There's a lot of positive emotion in this poem. I could feel it and imagine myself in your shoes. It's really nice. If you write this in 2010 then your granddaughter is now about 9 years old! Time flies and they grow up so fast. Thank you for this great read.
I really, really like this poem. I like how it flows and creates a picture. It's difficult to do that when you're trying to make both the beginning letter and the ending letter in each line match. Very creative. I don't have any criticism to give. Thank you for the read :)
You write so well. I wish I could write half as good as you. I like the clear images you create and how beautiful they are. The one about the camera reminds me of my Grandmother. She used to always carry a camera around with her. She captured my entire childhood. I'm very grateful she did. I enjoy looking at the photos.
This is such a sweet poem. People aren't perfect and love isn't perfect. We're all perfectly imperfect, I suppose. Thank you for reminding me of this :)
Poetry is a great way to express feelings and emotions that not a lot of people understand. It's also a great way to express the feelings you're feeling inside instead of letting them all out and take complete control. I can relate to most of your writing as to I have some simulator feelings. Do you like reading poetry? If you do, I have a lot of poetry based on this kind of thing in my portfolio. You should take a look!
This is very good! It's nice and short and to to point. On the fifth line down did you mean to say "Bit" or "But"? and by reading it I feel that the word "But" is used to often. I mean well by pointing these out. Maybe you want to publish this someday? I really admire this piece. It has a lot of feelings tied to it.
This is so beautiful and I really hope you're okay. One can never tell if this is fiction or nonfiction. Only the writer knows, really. I know that everything I write relates to me 100% with just the names and settings all scrambled and mixed. Like I said, I really hope you're okay and well. I can only wish that things have changed for the better but it's hard to tell sometimes. This poetry is so amazing and beautiful in every way shape and form. If this is true for you or even if it isn't you can talk to me about anything. Just message me and I'll get it sometime. If you're ever bored sometime you can read some of the things in my portfolio.
You did a great job forming an image in your poem. I could see how hard the boy was working to build his sand castle and I'm so glad that he wasn't too upset when the waves washed it away. Then the by wet ad played with others. This is almost like it's from an adults view as they watch their children but I an kind of see it happening from other perspectives because of how well the details are written. Thank you for displaying this on the Please Review page. It was a pleasure reading it and giving my feedback
~SodaSaya
This is great! Nice job comparing. I wouldn't have understood what exactly you were talking about unless you gave detail. I agree and I feel the emotions you show. I've had a similar thing happen to me with my family and online things. I just wasn't sure who to trust or who to believe. I don't see any grammatical errors. Once again nice job!
I love this. Purple is my favorite color, too! This poem made me laugh. It made me so happy inside. Thank you for making me smile. It's a lovely poem and I'm glad you wrote it! I don't see any grammatical errors within the piece... Although, I'm now too well at finding those. The flow is great.
Write On!
~SodaSaya
This is an ingenious and easy way to get to the things you like without having to search through the whole site. I wouldn't be able to think of this. It may seem obvious to you, but this is pretty cool. I feel that this is something everyone should know how to do (though everyone but me probably already know this.)
Very nice! I love how it's all very true and wonderfully put into rhythm words and couplets! I like the font you chose to present the poem with. Green is such a good color! the size is good as well' I wasn't squinting at the screen. Write on! SodaSaya~
Wonderful poem. We share a common idea; I don't like summer vacation because I miss how organized and loving school is. I'm welcomed and greeted at school, but in my own home, I'm pushed away into a corner in my room with a few homework assignments to get my mind off of hardships that are at home. I love school.
Well I can say this: I feel that everyone has the problem but is better at hiding it than some. I myself has this problem. On my portfolio I have two poems which are called "Who Am I?" and "Honestly, What Do I Do?". I was very surprised when I was flipping through the Random Reads and found this poem which is labeled the same as mine but written way before. I assure you there is no copying. "But at this game I'm always losing" I agree full heartedly. This is an amazing poem and thank you for sharing it. Sincerely, SodaSaya {b-link:1920559}
I like this poem because it tells a somewhat of a story in a way. I like how you wanted to go to Venus to be alone and have control. The emotions are clear and the rhythm is set. This is a similar feeling that I have and I like how you put it in a poem. Write on! Sincerely, SodaSaya
I like that you had a goal, in which I am sorry failed. You can still try to meet this goal. You may not be able to do it everyday, but you can still try to do it as much as possible. I like the rhyme and elaboration, I know exactly what your getting at. Write on! Sincerely, SodaSaya
This is an excellent poem! I relate to this poem so much, and to me that's the best kind of poem. I have a friend that feels the same way as well. I like the conclusion on the end that tells straight forward what your wish is. I also like how it rhymes right there. Write on! Sincerely, SodaSaya
I love how this is all set up and how realistic it is. I am still going to High School so I know how every morning is, and how my mother can be in a vary rushing bad mood. It's refreshing to know I'm not the only one with such schedule. I like how the ending is, It sets the final mood and tells that this teen isn't really looking forward to the everyday task. I was surprised that that was that ending, you should continue and make it longer. Overall, it's a great read. Sincerely, SodaSaya
I love rainbows. I like the creativity and description you put into this poem. You described the rainbow in ways I wouldn't have thought of. Rainbows have this sort of passion that nothing else has, it's pretty amazing. Keep up the imagery and creativity! Sincerely, SodaSaya
it is important to know where people come from and it is interesting to see. I am from the U.S.A and I am proud that you asked that question! This must be a fascinating poll, because you get to see where people are from!
Sincerely. SodaSaya
"A Day on the Farm" was a great short story! I liked that the characters were chickens and how the setting and the plot were realistic. Normally when the story is about chickens the writer makes fun of them in a way, but this time they are realistic and personification seemed accurate, so the chickens had thoughts.
The plot was interesting because it was funny in a way. you hid the fact that they were all going to get that fate.
The time, place and other setting characteristics worked together nicely. it was on a farm and there weren't any odd aliens hanging around, if you see what i mean.
You used appropriate vocabulary and wording for this story. it fits together perfectly.
sincerely, SodaSaya.
Wonderful poem! i like the first line the most. I have no idea why but the sound of it is awesome!
"A mist falls over the woods"
The poem goes together perfectly and I love the words you used!
it is short and simple but vary special!
It vary mystical and dark and the way it should be- Love how it leaves at the end with a slight fright.
Oh what a wonderful poem!
I loved the whole poem because it nicely fit together in a soothing harmony (if you know what I mean)
Its so sad that it ended with
"Knowing that they could never be friends,
They silently walk pass each other,
Never speaking a word again."
but its just perfect because of its purpose.
Sincerely, SodaSaya.
P.S.
I'm looking for a writing buddy to read and talk about each others pieces. If you would like to accept the offer just reply back to me as soon as possible.
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