I'll tell you that my eyes do see:
A poem that spoke so perfectly.
Each stanza was the perfect length,
And the vocabulary, the perfect strength.
The contrast was pure delight,
Stating one for dark and one for light.
You wrote with scrupulous precision.
As an artist, you have flawless vision.
For writing it so long ago, it really was quite nice,
But I think it could be better, so here is some advice.
I would check the grammar and make sure that errors decrease,
Because it takes more than words to create the perfect masterpiece.
It is also lacking focus so concentrate on your theme,
Because he didn't seem too lonely and it was only a dream.
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