This is a fantastic story. The tone is formal. It suits the story and plot very well. The reader is wondering what John has seen outside. They will read to the last word to find out. The story is about a boy who thinks he sees a dinosaur outside if the garage. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The characters speak like real people. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. The story is well structured and consistent in terms of point of view and tense. You have accomplished a great deal in just a few words. Great job.
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is aggressive. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The poem is about a time when you lived engulfed in fear and uncertainty. I am hoping that your circumstances have improved. I read to the last word to find out if this happened. I loved this poem. The free verse works well in this poem, and you have handled it very well. There is a wonderful rhythm here. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is tinged with sorrow. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The poem is about how you love others around you but have never come to love yourself. I am hoping that you will develop the self esteem that you are lacking. I loved this poem and read to the last word. The free verse works well in this poem, and you have handled it very well. There is a wonderful rhythm here. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.
This is a wonderful essay. The title is enigmatic and attention grabbing. It tells the reader very little about what the essay is actually about. They are intrigued and will begin to read immediately to find out more. You introduce the topic with a brief story about a time you offered advice to a friend of yours. This takes all the reader's attention and focuses it completely on you and the essay. They will read to the last word. You have written about the problems you have encountered in giving people in your life advice and how this has affected you. The reader is delighted with the look they get at you as a person as well as a writer. The length is perfect. You completely develop your topic without belaboring the issue and making the essay tedious. I did come across one structural issue that needs your attention:
1)You have neglected to either double space or indent between paragraphs. You should remember to consistently do this to keep your writing clear for your reader.
You use a formal, organized style that is very appealing to the reader. Great job.
This is a fantastic story. The tone is formal. It suits the story and plot very well. The reader is wondering if the speaker will start actually hurting people. They will read to the last word to find out. In the story, someone is frustrated when their well meaning acts of kindness only get them anger in return. The characterization is fully developed and believable. The story concentrates on the speaker, and they come across as a real person. There is no dialogue but it is not needed here. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. The story is well structured and consistent in terms of point of view and tense. You have accomplished a great deal in just a few words. Great job.
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is full of joy and excitement. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. In the poem, you talk about enjoying taking your dog for a walk. We had a poodle when I was growing up. He didn't take many formal walks. It used to roam whenever he wanted. I loved this poem and read to the last word. The free verse works well in this poem, and you have handled it very well. There is a wonderful rhythm here. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.
This is a fantastic story. The tone is full of anxiety and fear. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The reader is wondering who is in Hanson's house. They will read to the last word to find out. In the story, a man is convinced his house is being continually broken into. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characterization is fully developed and believable. The story concentrates on Hanson and he comes across as a real person. There is no dialogue but it is not needed here. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. The story is well structured and consistent in terms of point of view and tense. Great job.
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is full of dread, sorrow and fear. It ripped at my heart and filled me with so much sympathy for you. I read to the last word to see if you were alright. The poem is about your intense fear of the water and what death there would mean. I loved this poem. The rhyme is well done and consistent. It gives the poem a wonderful rhythm. The meter is consistent from line to line. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is full of deep anxiety. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The poem is about how your dreams of your future were influences by what was happening in your family. The reader is delighted with the look they get at you as a person as well as a writer. They will read to the last word. The free verse works well in this poem, and you have handled it very well. There is a wonderful rhythm here. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Its definitely a dramatic, emotional poem. Great job.
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is full of excitement and anticipation. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The poem is about the excitement of waiting to open presents on Christmas. I remember well waiting to see what was in those lovely packages under the tree. I love Christmas. I loved this poem and read to the last word. The free verse works well in this poem, and you have handled it very well. There is a wonderful rhythm here. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.
This is a fantastic piece. The title is enigmatic and attention grabbing. It tells the reader very little about what the piece is actually about. They are intrigued and will begin to read right away to find out more. You launch into the piece without introduction or preamble. This takes all the reader's attention and focuses it completely on the topic and the piece. They will read to the last word. The piece is about our perceptions and the divine can intertwine. The reader is delighted with the look they get at you as a person as well as a writer. The length is perfect. You completely develop your topic without belaboring the issue and making the piece tedious. You use a formal, organized style that is very appealing to the reader. Great job.
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is full of joy and excitement. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The poem is about your love for your car and God. It is so good that you are so positive in your life. I loved this poem and read to the last word. The rhyme is well done and consistent. It gives the poem a wonderful rhythm. The meter is consistent from line to line. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.
This is a fantastic story. The tone is full of anxiety and guilt. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The reader is wondering what Todd is trying to write. They will read to the last word to find out. The story is about a young man who is trying to write a letter to his ex-fiance explaining why is leaving her and marrying her sister. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The characters speak like real people. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. The story is well structured and consistent in terms of point of view and tense. You have accomplished a great deal in just a few words. Great job.
This is a fantastic story. The tone is full of surprise and curiosity. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The story is about a man who must show his nephews what a snowball fight is. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is goin on here. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The characters speak like real people. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. The story is well structured and consistent in terms of point of view and tense. You have accomplished a great deal in just a few words. Great job.
This is a fantastic essay. The title is enigmatic and attention grabbing. It tells the reader very little about what the essay is actually about. They are intrigued and will begin to read right away to find out more. You launch into the essay without introduction or preamble. This takes all the reader's attention and focuses it completely on the topic and the essay. They will read to the last word. You have written about the steps to take to improve your life. The reader is delighted with the look they get at you as a person as well as a writer. The length is perfect. You completely develop your topic without belaboring the issue and making the essay tedious. You use a formal, organized style that is very appealing to the reader. Great job.
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is formal. It suits the poem and subject matter very well. The poem is about how each move we make influences the structure of time. I don't think about things like this often and was taken with this poem enormously. I read to the last word. The free verse works well in this poem, and you have handled it very well. There is a wonderful rhythm here. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.
This is a wonderful story. The tone is full of excitement. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The reader is wondering what Sofia will wish for. They will read to the last word to find out. The story is about a girl who grows huge and reeks havoc. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The characters speak like real people. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. I did come across one structural issue that needs your attention:
1)So I asked-There should be a comma after "So".
The story is consistent in terms of point of view and tense. Great job.
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is aggressive. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The poem is about letting yourself feel close to others around you. It reminds me of a person in my life. He doesn't share much from his life and seems to avoid getting emotionally close to others, even those in his own family. I loved this poem and read to the last word. The rhyme is well done and consistent. It gives the poem a wonderful rhythm. The meter is consistent from line to line. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.
This is a fantastic story. The tone is full of anticipation. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The reader is wondering what Phillip and his friends will do at Crystal Point. They will read to the last word to find out. In the story, a young man and three friends go on an adventure involving a crystal orb which can open a portal in the universe. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The characters speak like real people. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. The story is well structured and consistent in terms of point of view and tense. You have accomplished a great deal in just a few words. Great job.
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is full of pain and longing. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The poem is about someone who is yearning for the life they used to have. I am feeling so sorry for the speaker as I read. I am hoping that they get the peace they need in their lives. I read to the last word to see if this happens. I loved this poem. The free verse works well in this poem, and you have handled it very well. There is a wonderful rhythm here. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have not used punctuation in this poem, but this does not interfere with the flow. You have used grammar consistently here. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.
This is a fantastic story. The tone is formal. It suits the story and plot very well. The reader is wondering if Kay and Jay will get home in tine. They will read to the last word to find out. The story is about a woman whose overuse of the phrase "Not as far as I know" gets her in trouble with the police. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The characters speak like real people. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. The story is well structured and consistent in terms of point of view and tense. You have accomplished a great deal in just a few words. Great job.
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is forlorn and filled with pain but, still, tinged with hope. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The poem is about the displacement of refugees and how the separation from friends and family affects them emotionally. I feel so sorry for anyone having to flee their home to seek safety elsewhere. I loved this poem and read to the last word. The free verse works well in this poem, and you have handled it very well. There is a wonderful rhythm here. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is full of joy. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The poem is about God's love and everything He has given us. I have a deep faith in God and enjoy living surrounded by proof of His existence every day. I loved this poem and read to the last word. The rhyme is well done and consistent. It gives the poem a wonderful rhythm. The meter is consistent from line to line. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.
This is a fantastic piece. The title is enigmatic and attention grabbing. It tells the reader very little about what the piece is actually about. They are intrigued and will begin to read immediately to find out more. You launch into the piece without introduction or preamble. This takes all the reader's attention and focuses it completely on the topic and the piece. They will read to the last word. You have written about your father's alternative holiday to Christmas. The reader in delighted with the look they get at you as a person as well as a writer and your family. The length is perfect. You completely develop your topic without belaboring the issue and making the piece tedious. You use a formal, organized style that is very appealing to the reader. Great job.
This is a wonderful chapter. The chapter opens with a vivid description of the house in which these skunks live and are enjoying Christmas. The takes all the reader's attention and focuses it completely on the family and the chapter. They will read on. This is a wonderful opening hook. The detail puts the reader all the way into the chapter. You have set up your main characters are plot very well for the reader. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The characters speak like real people. The chapter is well paced. It moves fast enough to keep all the reader's attention, yet it moves slowly enough enough to allow the reader to easily follow what is going on in the chapter. I did come across one structural issue that needs your attention:
1)In a few places you have neglected to put each piece is dialogue in its own paragraph. You should remember to consistently do this to keep your writing clear for your writing.
The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. Great job.
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