When choosing something to read, the title and description of this story interested me. After reading it I wondered if it would or could be part of a longer story. But regardless, I found it interesting, especially the ending. That was written in a new way to what I've read before. Good work.
I enjoyed reading this short story and it fitted in very well with the description and title which was well chosen. Although it had a circular feel to it with the repeating in regards to the prophecy, it hinted at being part of a larger story, possibly a full novel. Nice work.
Reading the description and title increased my interest to see what this story was like. A hook like that is very useful. The actual content lived up to it's promise and I found it really enjoyable.
Good luck for completing this and I hope you find a buyer and/or have it published. It would be great to see the rest in print. Good luck.
I did wonder as to the meaning, yes, but as I read the entry here it all became clear. Well done at setting the theme and putting in here all that was created regardless of perfection as viewed.
The signature in the centre was also a nice touch and it made the layout more visual. Loking forward to reading some. Good work.
Good work. I thought the title of this poem reflected the content very well and it stands true for all of us, that kind of experience.
How the end of the third verse brought hope into the verse and the rest of the poem was well planned and you invoked the feelings of that and loss really well.
I thought this was an interesting short story that could posibly be expanded into a longer story dealing with how the elderly woman came about that ability and more examples of it in action.
But as a stand alone prompt story it was nicely done and the humour within was well chosen and placed. Good work.
This photograph was very amusing to see. I think you captured a cats character perfectly with that intense stare. they are so good at getting their point across.
It also leaves me to wonder what Boots' next step would be if that failed. Well done, thanks for the smile.
I thought this folder of poetry was nicely designed. The theme and title worke well as a description to a variety of topics and styles that were a good match for the graphic included as well. Good work.
I thought this story ws a good example on how a person's imagination can make things far worse causing the kind of scene found in this tale. The introduction showed where the inspiration came from, and I think that is really good, to be able to take old stories and rewrite them as recalled. The ending was interesting too. Good work.
I thought you did well on this poem, capturing the theme of love, with all the feelings including uncertainty and having the person writing it revealing their feelings about another. I found it easy to read.
I have one suggestion. In the introduction, it said the feelings of two. I couldn't find where the other person was putting in their bit, but I think a poem revealing both sides could be quite interesting. Certainly not something I've seen before.
I enjoyed reading this, you did a really nice job on this poetry style and including a real life situation on the anniversary was an effective touch. Good work.
I wasn't quite sure what to expect before reading this poem, but it didn't disappoint. Tying in music with a storm going on at the time of writing was an interesting touch and having it so both matched.
This observation made me smile. I could almost feel the annoyance coming from the kitchen, I thought it was well done and the last line summed it up really well.
This was an interesting poem to read. As I did, the rhyming pattern seemed to change throughout, which was something I hadn't seen before, but not a bad thing. Well done with portraying the situation.
That was a nice story, very enjoyable. You did well on the topic of looking back to understand distant relatives that one only heard about and realising how similar their lives were. Good work.
This was a good story to read. You did well with the characters and making them believable. I thought the ending was good. Showing what Jonathan believed, but stopping short if it was actual fact with the doctors for example, that I could see. Nicely done.
This was an interesting story. I liked how it worked out in the end. But it might have worked to offer further proof if he'd given his birthdate first otherwise it almost seems like he's working the facts to suit once realising he's trapped.
I just have two suggestions for the segments below.
“If you make any noise, I will slit your throat,” the man was breathing heavily. He hovered over her with the knife held out inches above her face. His hair was dirty and hung over his forehead. “Now tell me wear you keep your money.”
Should that be - Where you keep your money?
Struggling to breathe, she placed her hands around her neck and leaned back onto the other closet door. The man had trouble finding which compartment she kept her wallet in. He swear constantly while searching but could not find it.
Again, should this be - He swore constantly while searching.....?
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