I found your story to be quite unique on many levels and i liked the darkness that was settled throughout it. It was a very enjoyable read and it would be wonderful to read more! One thing i did notice was this...Dörthe <- this character's name was mentioned just a little bit too much in the near beginning. I feel if it were cut down two or three times it wouldn't be as jarring.
But other than that it was very interesting and keep up the good work!!! :)
Wow! i really enjoyed the beginning of your story! It seems to have a lot of potential and I would love to see what comes next! there might be like one or two spelling mistakes, but overall it is very intense and i enjoyed it! Keep up the good work! :)
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