Wow! you certainly have a demographic all planned out. While this is very honest and true, It feels a little too muted. It feels like there is more you want to say. Let it out. Do some screaming that you were talking about! A woman wouldn't calmly talk about her frustration and yearning, she'd roar about it. This is a great start! Add that extra growl to it and it will be amazing.
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